The Moon Rabbit

The Mystery of The Miniature Garden: Chapter 1: The Moon Rabbit

「Oi, Kuroha wake up, we're late!」 Kei shook my bed trying to wake me up. When I opened my eyes, the first I saw was a half dressed Kei shaking my bed, 
「Kei is still halfway on wearing her uniform......so I still have an hour left to sleep」 I tried to sleep again since I have one more hour to sleep. Take the opportunity when you see it, 
「Idiot! I overslept! look at the Clock! God of Clockworks! It's 9:21 am!」 I was surprised on what I heard but my priorities are set, 
「Then why are you waking me up in your underwear!」 I jumped up from my bed, 
「That's.....look, my chest......they are big aren't they? I thought that you might like seeing me in these adult like underwear.」 She started to blush, 
「Oh! and Azul told me that if I squeeze them up like this... it will make you happy」 She started to turn even more red, 
「Yeah, you look good so please wear your uniform」 I pat her shoulder as if that I am looking at her with pity, 
「do you want touch them?」 She slowly reached towards the hook of her underwear, 
「No, I don't need to so please wear clothes」 I refused her offer since we  are in a hurry, 
「I want you to touch it!」 She exclaimed
「Maybe next time....」 I laughed nervously
「I want you to touch it now!」 She insisted but since I feel like if I did accept her offer, I feel like something bad will happen to me. 

We argued for quiet some time and we heard the chime of Trinity that rings in 12:00 am and pm which means that we missed the academy since the Academy schedule ends at noon. 
「damn it, we missed the academy」 an awkward silence broke out in the room, 
「.......are you going to wear your clothes now?」 I asked Kei, 
「Aah, my bad for losing my cool」 Kei apologized and she went to the bathroom to wear her clothes. 

While I was waiting for Kei to finish using the bathroom, I noticed a letter on my table, 
「I don't remember receiving this......」 I thought it was something suspicious since every letters that was addressed to the students, the dorm landlady was suppose to leave it in the academy lockers and they don't give it to the students directly. I grabbed the letter and opened it, the letter was written in fancy red glowing letters, 

「Dear Kuroha-sama, 
  My name is Rue, I came from the Moon Rabbit species so I sent you this letter as a challenge from the Moon Rabbits. The challenge will be held in a secret place chosen by our key player. This challenge is for someone who wields strong and unbeatable power. The main rule of this challenge is to solve the mystery and the given task by the key player without using the power you now hold. Don't worry, every player will be given a new ability by the key player. There are thousands of players that will participate in this challenge and each player will be given their own field to solve their own mysteries. Kuroha-sama, you are our long awaited player, we were waiting for you to obtain all your memories and full power since without you our game would be meaningless. Please use this key to any door to enter the challenge and before you join in, please choose between Kirika or Neko」 Without thinking, I picked Kirika and went to my door then placed the key. The door did not opened, instead it flashed a bright light in front of me. I was sent to another place.............again. 
「I am getting tired of getting transported in surprise」 I sighed while my eyes still closed.

When I opened my eyes, the thing that was in front of me was......the gigantic Earth. 
「Uwaa....this is first...」 I laughed nervously. 
「Welcome to the moon, Kuroha-sama, our last player」 A man with a long light blue hair. He was wearing a black tailcoat  and black pants. Not surprising, he has bunny ears, 
「My name is Rue. I will explain the tasks you have to solve. First: Solve the mystery of The Miniature Garden. Second: Is to save The Miniature Garden Amusement Park from bankrupt while trying to solve the Mystery that lies inside The Miniature Garden.」
He explained everything that I have to do, 
「I will now send you to the place where you need to be」 A gate appeared below me and it slowly pulled me in. While I was being pulled in the gate, Rue said something that caught my interest, 
「Please don't reach in to insanity」 He bowed. 

Vision Change ~Rue Vision~ 

While I bowed down to Kuroha-sama, I warned him about the dangers of the challenge. The usual reaction given by the players was a confused face but Kuroha-sama gave a really rare reaction.......he smiled at me and said, 
「Don't worry, I already reached that point long ago」 Just by seeing that reaction, I immediately knew that I could leave Castle in his protection. Before Kuroha-sama was completely pulled in to the gate, I added one more thing, 
「Please, take care of Castle....my little sister for me」 and the reply I got was, 
「Your little sister will be safe......I guarantee it so take of what problem that is on your side」 then he finally went in the gate.......
「Thank You」

To be continued Chapter 2: The Hollow Affection

Author's Note

You read this so reviewing it is not that hard.

A review or correction is much appreciated, much obliged

Reviews

[kclyaine]

This sucks... you actually copied the problem but added only a few changes. You spell oppurtunity wrong. And the other guy is right. Just choose either 'our' and 'the', but not both.

[❀Subaru_Nyaa!❀]

which problem did i copied?

[kclyaine]

The part where the amusement park got bankrupt. You plainly just copy the concept.

[❀Subaru_Nyaa!❀]

Amagi Brilliant Park, I just wanted to make the first chapter to be in the line of the whole funny concept I wanted to make which is..you'll see in the chapter 2

[kclyaine]

Ok, I'm just disappointed that you copied a really great concept but used it just to make a challenge for kuroha, which I'm pretty sure can solve it like it was nothing.

[KeithKVH]

I'm into Touhou, so all this about moon rabbits and miniature gardens reminds me of the folks from Entei. Kei's underwear scene is more daring than I could bring myself to write, not that it's a bad thing. *_*
I did spot a few things you might look at:
-a secret place chosen by our the key player-
Think it should be our key player or the key player
-Please don't reach in to insanity-
into instead of in to. Might be nitpicking, I dunno just seems more normal
-take of what problem that is on your side-
take care of the problems on your side. I think this was the general idea here.
And for some reason putting in < around my corrections erased them, so sorry if you read before I could correct that x.x