Cold.

Taylor(:

It's cold outside and I'm freezing.

I can't stop coughing and weezing.

I wish you were hear to warm me up.

Like hot chocolate in a coffee cup.

It's weird how far away you are,

but distance is nothing when I get a car.

I could really give a damn about not having a license

because, not seeing you is a crisis.

In my heart and my head.

Forget everything that everyone has said.

I'll make you feel beautiful and worth something more.

You are a girl worth fighting for.

I'll draw my sword, I'll point my gun, I'll put my fists in the air

because, you and I are the perfect pair.

Sometimes, you get on my nerves and make me mad,

but it's better than sitting there and making me sad.

I love you dear

With me, you have nothing to fear.

I will never hurt you and make you feel alone.

Making me feel like I'm in a chill zone.

I just wanted you to know that I love you.

And I've been thinking lately and  I want you to be the girl that I say the words. " I do."

 

 

Author's Note

My heart collapses when I talk to her. Feedback?

Reviews

[HOLyP]

I have to agree with Chelsea.
"I'll draw my sword, I'll point my gun, I'll put my fists in the air
because, you and I are the perfect pair."
Really really cool line. Overall there's not much I can say that hasn't already been said. I like it, I can relate to it and I've felt like that too at some point.
Keep up your work!

[Child Spirit]

I really really like this poem its
really quite a tapestry of a lonely hearted couple and honestly
I have not had a lover for a very long time . Alas if anything you shouldn't just sit on your backside feeling sorry for yourself you should approach her with apologies from the heart . Great poem btw ( By The Way )

[Konigin]

I thought that this super frickin sweet and it made me smile big to read your loving words. :)

Nitpicks/Suggestions
¨I wish you were hear to warm me up¨ It would be ¨here¨ not ¨hear¨
¨And I've been thinking lately and I want you to be the girl that I say the words. " I do." May I suggest taking out that second ¨and¨ and starting a new line there? I think that it may flow just a little better that way

I would have to say that my favorite lines here are:
¨I'll draw my sword, I'll point my gun, I'll put my fists in the air
because, you and I are the perfect pair.¨

BEAUTIFUL!!!!! ^.^ I really liked it Casey!