The feelings

 

I really wonder if this is true

The fellings that i'm for you

When you're away I'm awfully blue

And my timidness would be the clue

 

You're my true source of inspiration

For your presence brightens up my day

Being close have some hesitation

I want to see you what can I say?

 

So much happiness fills up my heart

When i witness your innocent smile

In my weary heart you have a part

Recognized your face even from a mile

 

Now I proved that you're really special

For your appearance bears in my mind

Being apart is just some trial

But our destiny will have us blind

Reviews

[Tanya]

its a very nice poem. double check through out the poem. the mistakes make it a little hard to read. i love it. though. mind reading some of my work.

[Hayame]

This was a really good piece. Just a quick run through to double check for spelling errors and it'll be perfect. :) You should enter this in a poetry contest!

[fallendemonofmercy]

the way this piece flowed was recurring and rythmic - you spelled feelings wrong
and the message this gives is pleasant - so many lovers out there and you took the words from some of their mouths