I'm Sorry, So Sorry....

just an old poem that was deleted earlier by writers cafe...grrrr

I'm Sorry, So Sorry....

I'm sorry that I trusted you

I'm sorry I was wrong

I'm sorry that I gave my heart

To one that it didn't belong

 

You were sorry too, you said

For the lack of love and care

Sorry that you had no time

No time at all to spare

 

You made my life a turmoil

You gutted me with lies

But most of all the deepest cut

Was the indifference in your smiles

 

I gave you all I had to give

You gave me none at all

Just said the words, went thru the motions

That's when my heart did fall

 

So, sorry that I trusted you

So sorry I was wrong

You made my heart turn to ice

and yet you made me strong

 

Many years have passed by now

Many regrets yet it is true

I know that it is over

I know that we are thru

 

You took away my faith in love

You took it for a while

But there is hope & faith in me that

Another.. may help me smile..

 

© 2007 Melanie Stormzz

Reviews

[Bear]

Amen... the human heart; beats with love, for love; open to new love... I suppose we've all had our heart broken at some time along the way... we just have to keep on going, day by day; enjoying those that we know, the ones that we knew, and be open to the ones we may get to know.

Good write!! Brought back "times" for me. Thanks for sharing!! ;~) Bear

[Albert Freeman]

Great poem, Stormz. At first I was going to launch a vigorous defense of why I ate all the candy, but as I read I realized it wasn't about me.:P Love the flow of your poetry.

[Michael Kerr]

my regrets, i feel this way too and i know i hurts doesnt it?

-mike kerr-

[Susan]

what a powerful poem here. I can so identify with all of it. Sometimes, the pain of the breakup makes us stronger. Sometimes, it can destroy what faith we had in ourselves and in others...
thank you for saying it like it is...
Susan

[Samuel Dickens]

And so, another has made you smile. This story has a happy ending---or is it just the beginning?

[Laura E. Aranda]

The only misspelling that I see would be the use of thru.......you might consider using 'through' instead. The rhythm was great, another mysty original~ cheers,lea

[The Grammar Nazi]

Wow, this poem is a GREAT down to up. It's truly an amazing write. I love it.

[Carole]

Wow-I felt your pain here, Melanie. A very emotional write, but beautiful in that you were able to get it out on paper and in such an elegant and heart felt way. This is one that many can empathize with. It is no fun to have our hearts thrown away. Though I could feel the pain in the duration of the write, you picked it up in the end with....

You took away my faith in love

You took it for a while

But there is hope & faith in me that

Another.. may help me smile..

I love how you ended on a good note. And hopefully, you are back on the mend. Very well done... (((Hugs))), carole

[Michael X]

and this is beautifully envisioned, in way of passionate forward thoughts, now i see what you mean by
poetry in motion, truly, each word is built upon the other creating a rolling effect, how your sentences
seemed to come to life in the moment, the heartfully projected meaning, subtle passions defining a
love torn, finding truths in emotional tragedy, in way of picking up the pieces, and being able to move on to new horizons, introspective, and engaging, very nicely done melanie.