Setting Standards (original)

Bringing the comments back....

We often get caught in webs of hesitation
Looking for motivation
Too often finding the answer
In greed
All given the need to feed
To conquer our hunger for success
The mentality 

We all possess
Not realizing we digress
By our own actions

Satisfactions are being met
How can one not regret
The pollution they serve to these streets?
Carrying heat
Aiming with no goal
Standing on feet that have no "soul"
As if that s**t sets standards
Human hazards
Contaminated by society
Lost in the variety of trends
Trying to pretend
To be something they are not
The blocks are hot
Due to lack of deputation
Not lack of education
Our elders get no respect
Our own children we don't protect
Yet
As long as we collect what's owed
We feel we showed
Our own methods
Of democracy

Reviews

[Akaila]

aiming with no goal! i like it!! good job!
~akaila~

[Monique Jackson]

Oh this is niiiiiiiiiiice! I like the Aiming With No Goal. I am really feeling this. You came at a lot of different angles without even having to go in depth. This was very enlightening and powerful at the same time. Beautiful piece. And I enjoyed the flow too.

[Troy Baham Jr.]

Aiming with no goal
Standing on feet that have no "soul"

wow. you must think you're really witty....don't you?

poetical DYN-O-MITE!

[who?]

i love your poems truthfully this one has so much power in the flow it speakes to me on a personal level BRAVO

[Jeff "jazzman"..]

This was hot, I love the flow and the fire in this piece....Excellent work!

[Sandra]

Good job girl!
Standing on feet that have no "soul" - great line!
There's some good stuff here that we could, and should take to heart.
In that last part, did you mean "feel"?
as in ...
"We feel we showed
Our own methods
Of democracy"
I think I'll read this again just to see if I missed anything.

[Carl]

yet again you astound me with your heart and your poetic flow. loved it Li

[William Griswald]

This is extremely powerful for -just a realease- as you put it. I'm not sure what goes through your head (compared to the average person), but you are definitely more aware of situations and surroundings (a. k. a. goings on in the ongoing) than most, in my apathetic opinion anyway. I respect your discerning views, LiLi.

[Fade]

Very nice flow. This felt like the old Watts Prophets kind of flow (without the misogyny). I liked the lines:

"By our own actions
Satisfactions are being met
How can one not regret
The pollution they serve to these streets? "

Nice work.