Theoretic Poetics (original)

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Unveil the illusion
Avoid the confusion
Distracted by delusion
A mind is wasted
Salt of insanity
Is tasted
Leaving you left standing
Commanding
Reparations
Contemplations arise
Finding the demise
Of what the eye supplies
It’s not
The way
To live
And we give
Alternative
Narratives
Of the same subject
In a different view
It’s you
And me
Trying to see
One thing
Separately
Desperately
Fighting
To find
The right expression
Meeting perfection
Of retrospection
Same subject
Different minds
Trying to find
Metaphors
During a down pour
Catch
The
Flow
Show the world
Your verbal perspective
Be respective
Ink is permanent
Can’t be erased
You can’t talk
After being defaced
Theoretic
Poetics
Define the individual
Residual
Aspects
Should remain
Untamed
Every name
Deserves
Their own fame
Whether underground
Or urban bliss
Persistence
Reminisce
Don’t dismiss
All the derogative
Statements
Find them placement
Adjacent
To positivity
Creativity
Can be found in harmony
The soul
Sings
Upon things
Giving light
Taking one flame
To ignite
The heat
Of another heart
Be the start
Of a revolution
We go unheard
After we speak
We tweak out
The truth
We reproduce
But don’t teach
Talk but don’t preach
How far can I reach
Until my hand is accepted?
We say we are protected
Every day
We are subjected
To the exact opposite
Of what we construct
Definitions are corrupt
Upon rhythm and rhyme
Fast-forward
Don’t rewind
Leaving behind
Defilement
Represent
What you stand for
Not the hype
Be the ink
That you write
Fight to the fullest
Until your well runs dry

Reviews

[Orlando Murcia]

I wish you could watch me give
you a standing ovasion right now
This was awsome, I mean Damn

I loved every rhyme and rythm
Every word and style

You did a wonderful job Gorgeous

Fantastic write!!!

Orlando M

[Theta S. T.]

i love spoken word it gives meaning to a lot of things that many people just don't understand in a rhythmic way

"Be the start
Of a revolution
We go unheard
After we speak "

i like this.....it's real....

[Cade]

Damn you just lit it up didn't you? Great flow and a consistent bash of words made me read it twice.

I'm not just sucking up ;)

Really nice work

Much love,
Cade

[Katie B]

This reminds me of "La Vie Bohem" from Rent. Which is a good comparison because I love Rent.

This just feels like a call to action and I love that. I especially like the end part

"Be the ink
That you write
Fight to the fullest
Until your well runs dry"

This part could me an so many things and one can personalize it to themselves which is what makes this a great spoken word. Excellent write

[R. MonaLeza]

Damn you did it again. Okay, I gotta get on the ball and use some of that LiLi magic. I gotta keep up with my b*****s! Much love, Mo-Z

[Jeff "jazzman"..]

This was pure poetic fire...Great work!

[Crap!]

Very independent and strong creative drive to it. I liked the edge.

[Mr. Deft Diction]

Yo...maybe 'cause I had noise back here around ME, I didn't hear your little lady and Charolette's Web in the background. What I DID hear was a cocky a*s flow and some real s**t being said. I think this a great piece, Li...keep doin' the damn thing!

CHEA!

[V]

you should write while watching kiddie movies more often...

excellent s**t Li

me

[REALIZE]

Whether underground
Or urban bliss
Persistence
"Reminisce
Don't dismiss
All the derogative
Statements
Find them placement
Adjacent
To positivity"

You put this together real well. I love that part because you made it flow so effortlessly. Then you dropped knowledge on us towards the end that hit my brain quick as I closed my eyes and heard you speak to me.

"Every day
We are subjected
To the exact opposite
Of what we construct
Definitions are corrupt"

Power, love
Much power.