Laws Of Poetic Property ~NEW EVOCA

Self recorded.. not perfect.. but.. still a great creative outlet. :o)

 

 

From this day forward
All violators will be prosecuted
For all the alphabetic individuals
They've prostituted
For personal gain
All pens will be confiscated
And held as evidence
Under poetic domain
And we will retain
Strict levels of surveillance
To ensure that all measures
Are being taken
To prevent
Any further damage
To the poetic name

Throughout
The past decade
We have begun to see
More and more poetic exploitation
And decided to form a foundation
In hope that inspiration
Can once again be restored
We can't afford
To be losing minds
To such demeaning material

Therefore
To take action
We have decided to
Write the future
For all of those
Whom under us
Will carry on the tradition
Of rhythm and rendition
Putting forth nothing
But highbrow compositions
Completely supportive
Of what poetry and spoken word
Is meant to be

I hereby decree
That poetry
Will not come to be
Something dead
The time has come
We surpassed
All the intellectual discrimination
Creating a new rhythmic generation
To better the welfare of lingual affect
We have the right to protect
All the words that stabilize our creativity
And have seen too much negativity
Surround the basis of what we choose to represent

We ask for all to write in compliance
With our alliance
As we try to make the poetic world
A better place
And hope that the past illusionists that called themselves poets
Can be replaced
With those more worthy of the cause

Let us
Together
Write the Future

Reviews

[Girl, Interrupted]

i REALLY liked the first stanza.
All pens will be confiscated
And held as evidence
Under poetic domain
And we will retain
Strict levels of surveillance
To ensure that all measures
Are being taken
To prevent
Any further damage
To the poetic name


great poem, otherwise. it reminds me that some people...i guess they dont know where the boundary lies for writing trash or treasure. no self-control really and all their arguments are weak.

[Nik'aule]

When I read this, I think of watching Def Poetry Jam with some guy gyrating his hips going on and on about how Asians can still do it with a little *ic*, and being completely APPALED. All the great poets who spend time and energy just to attempt getting on this show, and this is who they choose? Is the object to dilute poetry like what has been done to music? I love this piece because it signifies a revolution that begins individually, and that is a cause for MAD RESPECT to you, ma'am. And keep lighting fires. The chaff will burn.

[SolomonSavant ~ The Rog..]

Well this is just amazing...

[Bill Suter]

From this day forward
All violators will be prosecuted
For all the alphabetic individuals
They�ve prostituted
For personal gain
All pens will be confiscated
And held as evidence
Under poetic domain
And we will retain
Strict levels of surveillance
To ensure that all measures
Are being taken
To prevent
Any further damage
To the poetic name


Sorry I haven't been around the site in several months, Li, I've barely been anywhere (poetically in any case). So you've declared war on the pretentious and overblown babblers of the world? That's quite a flock to lead to redemption, young woman. I hope someone of good character (and excellent skills) has got your back throughout this confrontation.

Nitpicks: second strophe, third line-"we have begun to see"
third strophe, sixth line-"under us, who"

Very nicely done, Li
And gentle for a battle cry
Bill

[William R.]

holy s**t gurl. When I give reviews, they are usually all "I hate to burst your buble, but this is pretty weak." Not so here! This is a masterpiece! I love the vocal delibevery too! I wont even INSULT this piece with my interpretion, other than saying: this stands on its own, may lend itself to whomever for whatever purpose, and it is excellent irreguardless. A manifesto, a wonder, a favorite!

I dont know what you did, but *applause*

[Aaron]

Dang... I miss being on here and reading your stuff! Miss listing to you lay it down! Great piece... I've said this before, but I definitely admire how much substance you put into a flow!

[IMOGEAN]

This is very unique. A refreshing and different poem that I really enjoyed.

[Stephen Schmidt]

That was awesome...
Stephen Schmdit

[Jonathan Escoffery]

That's some hopeful words you use there. I haven't felt too much like writing poetry lately. I think it's kinda on life support in my mind. But I like this "decree".

[Nikki]

why do i feel the need to sign...fight the power??? HMMMMM

love this amazing.....will write more later

[M J Moore]

*kisses*

You're wonderful, Li Li. Too great! Write the future. Use that pen and put it to use, in a truly artistic form of expression!