Laws Of Poetic Property ~NEW EVOCA

Self recorded.. not perfect.. but.. still a great creative outlet. :o)

 

 

From this day forward
All violators will be prosecuted
For all the alphabetic individuals
They've prostituted
For personal gain
All pens will be confiscated
And held as evidence
Under poetic domain
And we will retain
Strict levels of surveillance
To ensure that all measures
Are being taken
To prevent
Any further damage
To the poetic name

Throughout
The past decade
We have begun to see
More and more poetic exploitation
And decided to form a foundation
In hope that inspiration
Can once again be restored
We can't afford
To be losing minds
To such demeaning material

Therefore
To take action
We have decided to
Write the future
For all of those
Whom under us
Will carry on the tradition
Of rhythm and rendition
Putting forth nothing
But highbrow compositions
Completely supportive
Of what poetry and spoken word
Is meant to be

I hereby decree
That poetry
Will not come to be
Something dead
The time has come
We surpassed
All the intellectual discrimination
Creating a new rhythmic generation
To better the welfare of lingual affect
We have the right to protect
All the words that stabilize our creativity
And have seen too much negativity
Surround the basis of what we choose to represent

We ask for all to write in compliance
With our alliance
As we try to make the poetic world
A better place
And hope that the past illusionists that called themselves poets
Can be replaced
With those more worthy of the cause

Let us
Together
Write the Future

Reviews

[Girl, Interrupted]

i REALLY liked the first stanza.
All pens will be confiscated
And held as evidence
Under poetic domain
And we will retain
Strict levels of surveillance
To ensure that all measures
Are being taken
To prevent
Any further damage
To the poetic name


great poem, otherwise. it reminds me that some people...i guess they dont know where the boundary lies for writing trash or treasure. no self-control really and all their arguments are weak.

[Unspoken Wordz]

Another great piece that I've read from you. Keep on doing your thing. I love it. will continue to read up. One Luv

[Thug Life]

this poem not only had humor, but so much truth to it. we nneeda find these ppl and stamp em out! the flow was amazing, very easy to read. the part bout pens bein held as evidence was brilliant!!! This is def. one of my favorites! This reminds me of wha me n you were talkin bout the other day, aboubt these artists killin rap.. beautiful piece!

[Fade]

This is brilliant, inspired. I love the rhyming free verse structure. More importantly, your poem is precisely what I "lecture" my daughter with as she tries to convince me that it's poetry if you can rhyme itch, with... well, you know.

Just wonderful. (Where do I sign?)

[Barry S. Maltese]

ROTFLMAO I can see the founding fathers as they discuss the Declaration of Independence standing around - only instead, Ben Franklin is reciting this piece. If you could only see my ear-to-ear smile. This regretfully, is also true, too many are out there committing these crimes that you describe in your decree. But we must live and learn.GREAT job. Very enjoyable reading!

[Jelani Wilson]

amen! the rhyme scheme here is great. effortless and natural. completely unforced. the line about confiscating pens was great. as a call-to-arms for writers, esp. poets, it has great energy that comes off both on the page and when read aloud. the last stanza is a great ending and let us indeed write the future.

[Maria Retz]

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful

I LOVE this poem.

Yes, let us write the future.

[Aya Azura]

LI!!! I love this sooo much, it made me smile. And the reason it's so funny is become it's so true. It's really tongue in cheek, and I know some people who read this will get mad, but I have read enough crap to know that there is some stuff that just is NOT poetry. This is amazing, I want to add this to my favorites list. If there was a poetry book somewhere, this should be the poem of the first page, and then some decent writers could write stuff after. This is simply too amazing, it's just so funny, because it's true. I love the beginning, it cracked me up. Awesome stuff as always, sorry I haven't been on much. I miss you, love. Great job!!

[Joe A]

ha ha ha ha!!!! this is great! i'm assuming you're writing w/tongue firmly planted in cheek (at least i hope so - i don't want the poetry police knocking on my door @ 3 am). really terrific work here. you should submit this.

[Alia]

Hey Li Li! I'm not sure if you remember me, but I was Storm of Bliss on ES. I've left that place for here, as a few have, it seems. :)

Michael sent me here and I'm glad he did. I would take his two nitpicks into consideration, you know, just to polish up a wonderful write such as this.

I don't really know what to say another than... HELL YEAH! Finally I am seeing some serious poets out there who care about the craft and don't think it's some baby game.

Thank you.

Loved the vocals, too. The perfect tone.

Take care!

Alia

[M. Andre Vancrown]

One suggestion, and then I'll get on with my review . . .

We have began to see

and

Whom under us

Ahh, two smears to an otherwise perfect poem.
"Have begun . . ." "who under us"

Tense. It's a b***h, isn't it?

Anyways, let me say that I've been around a few poets whose mission statement could best be summed up by this poem. It's bloody marvelous! I love the vocals as well. Mike P. and Alia would love this one, so I'm going to send it to them to read and comment.

The Revolution begins . . . now!

M~