Betrayal!

stuff that happened...recently...

 

I didn't see the darkness in your heart

nore the doubt that was welling in mine

untill the day the blood soaked through

and everything went far from fine

 

The darkness shattered your hope for love

that would keep you from wanting to die

even though I loved you so

doubt creeped in at every possible lie..

 

I cried for the time

I wanted only you

and now I cry sudden tears

at your lies I  held so dear

 

I stopped myself from loving anew

when all I could see of you was black

and now I can see that for you it meant nothing

because then for others you never held back

 

All the words of truth I said

my trust, my love, my torn apart heart I gave

I went through hell to bring you back

and ended up digging my hearts grave

 

I feel like I've been betrayed

for the hundredth time by you

I shattered a possible life

for a fake love that seemed to be true

 

Passion isnt the only key to love

sometimes its connections too

but your connection tore my life apart

and furhter ripped my heart in two

 

Help me lord, I'm falling apart

tell me what should I do?

I'm listening for your wisdom now

as I seek to find the truth

 

I'm falling, I'm falling, I'm falling

where is the one who said they would catch me?

oh I remember now

they were the ones who betrayed me

 

But Lord jesus you were always there

I saw you every day

standing in the back grounds

waiting for me to turn your way

 

well here I am before you

a dirty sinner broken and forgotten

do you still want me now?

am I worthy of your father up in heaven?

 

The answer is so clear to you

but I must wait and see

If you can help me through this mess

or if this is a trial meant to be

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

eh..idk if its finished yet but it is a rough draft, what you think?

Reviews

[The Analog Kid]

"All the words of truth I said
my trust, my love, my torn apart heart I gave
I went through hell to bring you back
and ended up digging my hearts grave"

That is a really nice stanza there. Very heartfelt and honest. Turn to him!

[Jason]

Beautiful....I love your artistic display within your writing. The way it flows throughout, and the passion I can feel pouring out of your metaphors..., It is truly a gift you have. Thank you for sharing. :)

[Kerwin]

you are so sweet and it shows up in your writing.....

[Marlena]

I like it, very raw and powerful. A lot of people are betrayed in their lifetimes and I think you pretty much got the feeling of being lost and helpless and needing a place to go dead on. Great job :)

[Boris Jonathan Novak]

It's raw emotion. That's a great thing! It's very well felt, and I can sympathize with what you've gone through. I'm glad you wrote this out. You'd be surprised at how your raw emotions can convey themselves in words, and you can share those issues with others who have felt it too. Thanks for sharing this. It's yet another great work from you.

[Trang]

It's really good and has a lot of emotions in it. There are a few gammatical errors, and I was a bit lost, is it prayer for help and guidance or a reflection of feelings?