My Pain eternal

When the darkness comes, will you be ready?

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It happens at night

In the darkest of hours

As they scream and they cackle

As the darkness devours

 

My life for others

I always say

But then the time comes

and I cry "Go away!"

 

Help me, Hurt me 

it doesn't matter anymore

As they chain my wrists

and slam me to the floor

 

They whisper in my ear

"cut the flesh and make it bleed

one long deep crimson line

is all you need"

 

I struggle and cry and

scream at them "No!"

My tears sting my eyes

and there is no more glow

 

They hand me a goblet and

push thoughts into my head

they say "drink the poison

so you'll be quickly dead"

 

I know they lie and I take the agony

as I still say "NO!"

they get angry as I struggle

and pour the poison down my throat

 

I wretch, I scream

I cough up blood

and to take my mind away from this pain

I cut my wrists with a knife that is no dud

 

"It hurts! It hurts! It hurts!" I scream

Please tell me this is all a dream?

They cackle and laugh at my pain

but they don't kill me oh no

they keep me alive and watch me go insane

 

They say "there is noone left to help you now"

and I know that this is true

As the endless agony continues

I can only think of you

 

My life for others

My life for you

I take this agony

and this heart that's ripped in two

 

My love, My love

I save thee now

As I take this agony

and for eternity drown

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Reviews

[Ama May Cooper]

I absoulutly loved this piece. Tearing emotions to shreds thru heavy pain. A great piece woven inbetween a pain that cud tear the mind into pieces.
Represented with power and creativity well done

[Twilight]

Certainly a very dark and emotional piece of writing, Voice11. I did wonder who "they" are, the evil entities which seem to confuse and terrify the protagonist? I was very much reminded of insanity,whilst reading this. Or at least, a manic state of mind. Indeed, sometimes it is difficult to determine the borderline between insanity, and what is a relatively normal level of high stress or emotion. After all, we all can feel extreme emotions or even a manic state, without considering ourselves to be insane.

"My life for others
My life for you"

The above lines are a clear reference to self-sacrifice, on the part of the protagonist. But, why? What is behind her confusion and terrible angst?

" I struggle and cry and scream at them No!!" These words suggest that the protagonist is having a psychological battle in her mind, between her true thoughts and the conflicting voices in her head. Thankyou, for sharing this with your fellow members of my Group, "Twilight's Disciples"! Who will be next, to add a piece of writing to my Group?

[Boris Jonathan Novak]

Wow! I REALLY LOVED the deep visuals on this one. Your talent is prevalent. The way you use imagery to convey the feelings in your poem is stunning. Another great work!