You and I

A longing in your heart....everyone's had it before

Just listen, Can you hear?

No, it's not the trees swaying in the wind or the birds that

sing upon them

Nor is it the ocean waves crashing on the rocks or the cars

speeding past us.

Close your eyes and listen closer

And you just might hear my heartbeat

Even though you're so far away each resonating pulse

Is filled with my neverending love for you.

All the things I feel , but can't find the words to say

All the love I want to show you, but can't cause your Oh so far away

All of it is etched into my heart to stay.

There is a curse between us,something is holding us back

All the pain we've endured, the times we've felt under attack

But each and every day we've never failed to watch eachothers back.

When once I held you up, twice you were my crying shoulder

When I felt that there was no hope, you said "just wait untill we're older

Now I understand that this love is true

My doubts are all gone, my fears you slew

Now all that's left  is what to do?

I'll wait for you forever, untill the time that I die,

Anticipating the day we are united

You and I

Reviews

[Marlena]

Even though you're so far away each resonating pulse

Is filled with my neverending love for you.

^^ Those are my favorite lines in this. This was adorable and so sweet, it's got this true sort of feeling behind it. Wonderful job :) Also, you misspelled "until" twice. Keep up the great work though!

[Natalie]

This was very nice. It was touching, I really liked it. It's funny cause I also have poem with the name "You and I." It's quite different than your's though. I really like how you put the title of your poem at the very end too. Great job :D

[Mr. Misanthrope]

This is so pure and amazing and rare! I've yet to come across such honest, innocent, and beautiful poetry such as this. There's just something about it. The words are coming straight from your heart. Truly lovely! Definitely going in my favourites.

[Dimples87]

What I love about your poetry is how it's so easy to read and captures you right away. How you carefully choose words that will stir your soul, warm your heart and allow you to go deeper within yourself. I love this poem because it makes you feel exactly what your words are saying, love it girl, keep writing.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

i am a lover of love poem .. i do like this one .. the longing is clear, the love , the feelings of that bittersweet longing to be with that one as one .. beautiful.
Chloe
xoxo

[Boris Jonathan Novak]

Absolutely beautiful piece worthy of stealing even the most distant of hearts, no matter how far away. ;-) This evokes pure emotion of the grandeur that is love. It's what makes the felicity of such a feeling the stuff that legends are born from. The honesty and expression in this work are beyond beautiful. Thank you for sharing such a magnificent, revealing poem!

[Clockwork]

I like the progression and the message. The rhyme of slew and do could be taken out because I am not sure that it adds that much to the piece. I like it overall thought. Keep at it my friend!

[Jessi Webb =)]

This is simply amazing ! I love it !