The other side of water

Last night I remembered a dream,
that I never had, about a place i'd never been.
I was aware, but not awake.
I was juggling so many thoughts,
I thought that one would surely break.

There were tasteless revelations,
of every dubious deed I'd served.
There were unthinkable, unkindnesses,
which no one had deserved.

I also knew quite quickly, that my arms would grow too weak,
to hold on to these memories,
I never again thought I'd have to see.

Then just seconds before,
these thoughts would find the floor,
Out of an unknown crevice,
I saw the light of an unopened door.

I constructed an edifice for safekeeping,
But just as quickly put it out of my mind.
Could this be the door I'd been seeking?
And if so, do I dare, step inside?

I threw all  caution straight into the wind, and with weary legs, I began to wabble them right on in,
And though I wished for some sort of warning,
In hopes of seeing some sort of sign,
I saw nothing save my own curiosity,
As well as a crack in time.

As I passed though I lost all feeling.
As I passed through I lost all regret.
As I passed through, I found that my physical form,
was replaced, by a perfect intent.

My eyes were no longer needed,
for all my senses were now divine.
I used them right away, to look back on my days,
though what I saw, made me change my mind.
What I saw, made me break down and cry.

You see, I thought I 'd lived my life by the "good book".
But in hindsight, the golden rule didn't apply.
For the train of pain, which I alone had conducted,
Left a wake, filled with empty, unlived lives.

Author's Note

. always appreciate any constructive criticism

Reviews

[Green]

The only thing I noticed was Devine. I believe you meant to put divine there. Other than that, I liked it. I especially liked the line, "but in hindsight, the golden rule didn't apply. For the train of pain which I alone had conducted, left a wake filled with empty unloved lives."
It's just a reminder to me to make sure how I think I'm living is actually what I'm doing. Thank you and well done.

[sinNsincerity]

We can never go back just forward and curiosity can takes us places we wished we never been, but glad we did. This is what it made we think about.
Great form and style in this. I really enjoyed reading it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the complete poem. You led the reader to a very good ending.
"You see, I thought I 'd lived my life by the "good book".
But in hindsight, the golden rule didn't apply.
For the train of pain, which I alone had conducted,
Left a wake, filled with empty, unlived lives. "
Life is fear. Must shake the mountain and move the waters of living to grasp and love life. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[steven sundell]

Enjoy and please let know what you think.
Thank u
pax 2 all

[steven sundell]

I sincerely appreciate your review "Green", I also feel honored that you took something positive from that which you read. Thx again.
p.s. the word "devine" was supposed to b divine, as you pointed out. Thx.Moreover, in the 2nd verse the word" never" was not intended to be used twice in that sentence.
Enjoy & Pax