Prison

Personal poem

Held captive in a prison, a prison with no walls.
No bars protect the windows, no guards patrol the halls.

Surrounded by fences, built upon fears.
Constructed by conscience, and strengthened by tears.

A self imposed judgment, proven guilty as a whole.
Payment for the past, by execution of the soul.

A solitary sentence, beyond all arbitration.
Sequestered by ego, and systematic deprivation.

The doors may seem closed, for no reasons apparent.
I know in my heart, they're simply transparent.

The only reprieve, the only glimmer of hope.
Is not to escape, but learn how to cope.

Reviews

[Legacy]

Steven Daveluy,

*Soaking it all in*...

To begin a review with 'I' all of the time is driving me crazy. Must find an alternative to that word.

You have done a great job, here, Steven!

"a prison with no walls" (NICE!)
"built upon fear" (WOW!)
"Self imposed judgment" ... "Proven guilty" (VERY POWERFUL)
"execution" (WORD PLAY IS WONDERFUL)
"Solitary Sentence" (FEELING IT~)

all quoted here:
reprieve, glimmer, hope, not to escape, to cope (ALL BRAVO).


I have enjoyed every line it seems, honestly, it would make a great submission into Dark Secrets (if you haven't already) on Poetic Infusion Society.

Going to have to read this many more times, I feel as if it were written for me.

Have a great day,

Legacy

[Midgy]

I personally loved it. There's a deeper meaning to the words which is so obvious if you know how to understand poetry correctly.
The imagery was great. As was the true emotion behind the words themselves. I find myself relating to this poem. I love it when that happens. This is really a wonderful piece. Great job.

[Brittany W]

Great imagery, this was a very good write and i really loved this.