�Betamax�

You make me feel the 6 foot man that I am
You make me 9 inches more than I first appear
You are the plans for successful building
You are the foundations that shakes the fear.

You are my twin
You are my best friend
You are a stranger
You are safe and you are danger…

You are the pixilated parts in censorship-
And that mini-second exciting pornographic flick
You are watching patiently for more
You are rewind and you are pause.

Reviews

[Gandré]

Even about video recorders can a good poet feel like making a poem.
Nowadays an obsolete system (the betamax) but the poem is cute and
I feel you liked the results, that what you have seen in the video. Thank you
dear for sharing with me. love, lara gandr�

[M Lamont]

There is something about this that makes me read this over and over. Each pass conjures up a new image and new thought. My favorite line "You are the pixilated parts in censorship". Don't know why but it makes me smile! Nice job!

[R. Gene MacDonald]

Short but smooth. Cool how you turn media into a reflection of how you feel about certain things, like your own self perception. Good work my friend from Norwich!

[Tawny O'hara]

I really liked the desriptive nature of this piece. I have a friend like that also. Who is opposite of me in many things but so like me in others. And, makes me more of a person than I feel I am.

Very good write and yes I think you could do more with this and pin point it more exactly.

Thank you for sending it to me.

[Blackbirdsong]

I really like this, but part of me feels that you could push it further and expland this a bit. I say this because it's good enough for to you think about returning to, if you wish.

All the juxapositions of who this person and isn't, really work well, especially since you compare them to technology and even yourself.

Good job.

take care :)

[Nannette LaRee~]

It's it interesting, how the person we need the most and trust the most, if the person we fear the most? I think it's because we know how badly it hurts to be damaged by the one person who is supposed to understand who we are...and love us anyway.

[TL Boehm]

You are the plans for successful building
You are the foundations that shakes the fear.

Sometimes you read something and lines just jump out - and you cannot articulate what it is that you like - you just like them. Its that way with these two lines. I just LIKE them. And the rest of the work as well.

[Bubo]

Very intriguing
drew me in straight away with
the title!
So many lines that one can ponder upon and think
yes...........I understand that!
Those machines were simply huge!

[Gary H]

Loved this. Great idea and impressive result. Of course, rather like Lara I wondered why you didn't call the poem VHS. But maybe this is more to do with a redundant feeling? Also I'm intrigued why you didn't use 'soulmate' instead of 'stranger'. Mmmm. Plenty to think about here so well done for another worthy write.

[T. L. O'Neal]

Interesting comparison to a video player. The poem had a good flow and I enjoyed it. T