"Bank"

Sit by the riverside
All film scene and wide
Drawing a love heart in the dust
The stick broke before I could finish it
So I just have to tell you that I love you

Go down to the pebbles
They are there to be pelted
Only then to be flushed away by the boats
You were left empty handed
So I gave you some of mine

Sit by the waterside
Nature is so much greater than me
I was pushed into existing
So I make the most of a situation
By making the best of a life
And I think that you should know that I love you.
 

Reviews

[Angelheaded Hipster]

I like the simple ways you "show" love, then having run out of the things you needed, you gathered up the nerve, or the will....whatever, and just said it.
I got a faint hint of maybe a school yard love....maybe it's the beach/lake scene of it....I don't know...but this is "cute" and quiet.
Sounds like a nice kind of love....

[Bubo]

Deliciously romantic, so many beautiful and very giving lines.

You were left empty handed
So I gave you some of mine

[Serge]

I really enjoyed this free verse. You said what you wanted to say and presented it very well. The last stanza I absolutely love. Lines 3-6 really pulled at something inside of me and just made me feel really good. This was a great piece and I am really glad I randomly clicked it on the group homepage :).