Walking with no Boundaries

This is a poem about my character in the dean's list. hope you enjoy. tell me what you think

Walking with no boundaries

I walk the street with no boundaries

I have no control of my emotions anymore

The past life was nothing but a suicide waiting to happen

Now my life is filled with money and respect

I walk the streets with no boundaries

The sins I have created are now in the air

It didn’t take long to get used to the

Gang activity we were doing, but was this

Really me.

I walk the street with no boundaries

Two years went by and I feel like I’m

I’m a robot serving a lord. This isn’t me anymore

How should I get out?

I walk the street with no boundaries

Love was spread through the room

BANG!

A burst of sudden shock came over my body

The one and only was lying on the bed with blood

Painted on the walls.

Was revenge or necessary or should it just be left alone

I walk the street with no boundaries

I need to find myself. There is no need for me

To stay anymore. I got to find who I am

And lose the life I messed up

 

I walk the street with no Boundaries

Let me know there is faith

Let me know I’ll be okay

Time is passing with every breath we take.

Reviews

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow I love this, Start a new life and find yourself away from the mess of the past. Very well written.

[InsanityWriter]

Very nice. :)

[Richard Anthony Goulart]

I liked this bro. This is very creative. bro keep them coming.

[Christopher Booyakasha]

that was pretty good bro. You had me going and going and going...And then it ended so i got upset

[Mr. Hyde]

I like the subjectivity of it, how only the speaker really knows what all of this refers to. That isolation makes it very relatable. Everybody is the only person with their experiences, and all that. Also, the disjointed phrases here and there really add to the atmosphere. Well done.

[Steven Ingels]

thank you

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

pretty good! :-) though at the begining you used the word boundaries twice in the same place in the sentence consecutively....

[Kryptonite120613]

very nicely written. it really shows what this character has been through. I like it

[Steven Ingels]

Thank you