Shattered Heart Meets Shattered Heart

Shattered Heart Meets Shattered Heart

A Poem by Steve H
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Wrote this in about 15 minutes, was talking with a freind about two people who find they have past heartbreak in common, and this just flowed out. Im quite pleased with it, would be nice to hear your opinions!

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Man with shattered heart stands with umbrella in the rain
As the fog swirls round his ankles, he stays thinking on his pain
When across the street his eyes do meet a woman wearing white
She stands out like an angel in the darkness of the night.
 
So black and white across the cobbles stop to share a glance
And through the rain he sees the moonlight on her eyeballs dance
They smile and hesitate a moment, then slowly take a pace
And in a moment two shattered hearts once more begin to race
 
For a shattered hearts beats in her chest, his is a pain she’s felt
How funny then that they should meet, fate’s cards have been well dealt
A gentle kiss upon the cheek is all the couple share,
But it hints at potent chemistry that is already there
 
Now as the icy fragments of their hearts move closer more
The shards are intertwining and creating one new core
So neither heart would heal to the whole that it once had been
But become one with another and eternally beat unseen

© 2009 Steve H


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Ugh. I love this one too. It's beautiful. Not like the headache inducing, pretentious language using, "What the HELL are you talking about?!" beautiful love poems I see around a lot, but simple, straight-forward, vivid imagery, "Why can't this happen to me?!", absolutely lovely... beautiful. The type of poetry that makes me empathize and wish I could at the same time. The one thing that caught me off-guard was "been" rhyming with "unseen" but you're from the UK so it's "bean" as opposed to "bin". Potato potahto. This is still gorgeous.

Also, you gotta love the poems that just happen. They don't take any real amount of time (to write or to read), but they're still so amazing. Between this and "Conscience Like A Cloud", I love your poems - however long they take. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Ugh. I love this one too. It's beautiful. Not like the headache inducing, pretentious language using, "What the HELL are you talking about?!" beautiful love poems I see around a lot, but simple, straight-forward, vivid imagery, "Why can't this happen to me?!", absolutely lovely... beautiful. The type of poetry that makes me empathize and wish I could at the same time. The one thing that caught me off-guard was "been" rhyming with "unseen" but you're from the UK so it's "bean" as opposed to "bin". Potato potahto. This is still gorgeous.

Also, you gotta love the poems that just happen. They don't take any real amount of time (to write or to read), but they're still so amazing. Between this and "Conscience Like A Cloud", I love your poems - however long they take. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wrote this in 15 minutes you say? definitely feels like you really thought about this...the whole poem really feels very sad and yet with a happy ending because they meet with broken hearts but mend each other's. great

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Steve H
Steve H

London, United Kingdom



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What to say? Half of a set of identical twins I was brought up on a farm in Hertfordshire. Attended school and am current studying Social Work at Royal Holloway University of London and hoping to go .. more..

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