Boot Brown Bar

fresh faced lieutenant

 

leads platoon with bravado

 

marching all to death

 

Reviews

[john alan willox]

wow - and wow again - nice work - less is more!

[SteveB]

Thank you so very much. Reviews that begin "wow" are always food for the soul.

[TK]

It seems as if you write from experience which although amazing in your work, seems sad and distant. Does that make sense?

[SteveB]

Thank you and it does. There is a sad and distant part, but there is also a hopeful part. I appreciate your review. I hope, given wht you said about your father, this one does not cause him pain.

[Quill~]

Awesome! a powerful senryu! Well penned.

[SteveB]

Considering you rgifts with the form high praise indeed. Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

A powerful thought and poem...Thank you for sharing...:)

[SteveB]

Thank you Sami

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

The truth in this brief poem makes me sad... Well done, Steve.

[SteveB]

Sorry Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

Never apologize for making someone feel with your poems - that's poetry!

[SteveB]

Ah, wasn't sure of which type of sadness. Thank you. You honor me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

eerie thought...reminds me of soldiers back in the revolutionary war who would march into battle single file..and be such targets...

but i also read this another way...i think of how innocence is lost when we march into love with rose colored glasses and then reality hits us like a bullet.

[SyberRose]

OMG...scary isn't it? well done Steve...Rose

[SteveB]

Thank you Rose.

[Rogue]

I knew a bunch of seasoned grunts in the Marines that ended up being led by a fresh faced lieutenant who had a degree in botony. Oh man they used to scream about this guy. He had no clue what he was doing.


Very apt three lines.

[SteveB]

Thank you Rogue. I remember hearing years ago the most dangerous thing in the world was a new Lt with a map and a plan.