Seasons

Seasons

A Poem by Mabojang

Winter gave way to spring,
Spring will be gone soon,
Then summer will come to us,
Hot weather, and bugs.
After that Autumn wind
Will blow the trees dead.
Lastly, winter will move again
And darkness will descend.

© 2017 Mabojang


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Mabojang
Please tell me what you think! I am interested in any critiques.

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The ending on your poem is perfect. The rest feels more so factual than anything else. I think it'd be great if you could expand on each season. Tell and make us feel what is so great or what is so dreadful about these seasons because we only have Summer and Winter slightly described to us. You could make us feel that all the seasons are wonderful and they bring light hearts and then as you go into Winter, make us feel the darkness. I do like the ending though, very enjoyed.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mabojang

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your comment! I knew this poem needed some work, and your suggestions will do .. read more



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The ending on your poem is perfect. The rest feels more so factual than anything else. I think it'd be great if you could expand on each season. Tell and make us feel what is so great or what is so dreadful about these seasons because we only have Summer and Winter slightly described to us. You could make us feel that all the seasons are wonderful and they bring light hearts and then as you go into Winter, make us feel the darkness. I do like the ending though, very enjoyed.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mabojang

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your comment! I knew this poem needed some work, and your suggestions will do .. read more

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Added on July 6, 2017
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Tags: Spring, Fall, Seasons, Winter, Summer, Season

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Mabojang
Mabojang

New York, NY



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