By your side forever

A poem about how i feel about a really close friend.

When I see the pain you hold,

It makes my body numb and cold.

When you need me scream and shout,

‘Cause I’ll come running without a doubt.

 

You’re the light that makes my day,

With every single word you say.

And I don’t quite know what you make me feel,

But I can tell you that this is real.

 

Don’t keep that pain locked inside,

I’m always here there’s no need to hide.

Let me know, I’ll be your saviour,

‘Cause baby I don’t like your sad behaviour.

 

I’ll be the shoulder that you cry on,

And I won’t leave until they’re gone.

I’ll be there by your side forever,

And I won’t leave you, never ever.

Author's Note

Anything that will help me make my poems and writing style better.

Reviews

[mae-mae<3]

This is very rythmic and well written. But try working on using more voice in your writing. Make it into something that best represents you. Never be afraid to show yourself in the words you write. That's what makes writing the absolute best. Show yours true colors and you can go far.

Your neighbor in words,

Mae


P.S. Welcome to Writerscafe. I hope to be seeing you around here.

[MrsBrown]

I love the last stanza especially. I wish i had a friend like u! No suggestions on how to make it better because its already gr8! im putting it in my library.

[NightsShade]

Your poem had a nice flow through out the whole piece. You seem like your really there for all your friends, and hopefully they're there for you too. Friends must mean a lot.
This piece also creates a good picture.

It could use a little bit more voice, and also a tad bit more of the emotions that your feeling. Then your writing could become stronger.

[shinybluestars03]

Well thats really awesome to know that
your friend can count on you, no matter what.
Hope your friend is there for you the same way.
Good poem with a great flow.
Thanks for sharing.

Best wishes.

[Shadow19]

i like it its cute aww :)

[Jeddie]

I love the rhyming scheme it paints a vivid picture in my head, it shows lots of consideration has been put into this obviously something that matters to you!