Nursery Rhyme for the Broken Hearted

A little rhyme I came up with after a bad break up. Hope you enjoy:)

I've never met Prince Charming

Never had a "noble knight"

I am my own stability

I've been my only light

You've killed me with your lack of words

I've suffocated in neglect

And all I sought was your approval

In exchange for my self respect

Your deception clouded my perception

I mistook "love" for your erection

But darling I failed to mention

I still have my intellect

And time may never heal me

Never ease this pain I feel

But at least I've learned my lesson

My love for me is the ONLY love that is real.

Author's Note

I hope you can overlook the lack of commas, I didn't want to use them. But enjoy otherwise!

Reviews

[Kaylor Mason]

Cool

[Sierra D3]

Its really good. love the truth about it.

[StephMichelle]

Thank you:)

[pumpkin head]

What a wonderful read, really enjoyed this.

[StephMichelle]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it:)

[Persephone]

What a lovely poem! Again I completely relate! It's so true, ourselves are the only ones we can truly count on :)

[StephMichelle]

Glad to hear! And yes I feel it's best to trust the one person you know the most.

[The Jay]

It really personifies a new-found feeling of self-dependency.
In the 9th line, it should be "your", not "you're".

[StephMichelle]

Thank you for that! I'll correct it.

[Bare trees]

You bring up elements of a relationship that rear their ugly head often. Especially when the guy is young. You sound intelligent and independent and I didn't mind the lack of commas. Good poem.

[StephMichelle]

Thank you! I try taking a realistic approach when putting emotions on paper (which can be difficult at times). I'm usually more grammar conscious but I'm glad you like it:)

[nigrum homonculus]

this was really good. definitely more mature than most of the poems i see about break ups on this site. the rhythm was pretty much on point aswell. well done.

[StephMichelle]

I'm glad you enjoyed it! I tend to worry about my use of excessive wording and how it affects the overall flow. I'm happy to hear it works in this piece.