Ballad of fallen angels

We learned about ballads in my english class ( 8 and 6 syllables repeating) So I tried.

It was an unrelenting fall

Through the clouds, down to hell

It is a story for all to know

the curse of being proud.

Greed and jealousy are fatal

 Lucifer learned his lesson.

God's favourites die easily  

to teach morality.

The angels envy us humans

Walking upon the earth

We fear death, so we truly live

Optimistic till death.

Destroyers of our own world

and everything on it

gluttoning ourselves to death

and we know it very well.

This is not earth any more, it's hell

angels who never fell

We didn't deserve a chance to

we did not fight for it

Angels were perfect until the end

we risk the wraith of nature

Just like those who were once above us

now we pray for a saviour

We break every sin set before us

we never think twice about it

No matter what the consequence bring

there will be another

A new race to live in god

we will be the lesson

The moral of out story

live before you can die.

Heaven was another world

that got ruined by men

an experiment gone wrong

and we are the same thing

this tale will end soon enough

but a new one will start

we will be made into angels

and be set on repeat.

Author's Note

I suck at syllables but any comments will be appreciated

Reviews

[Tanushvi]

It's a very beautifully written poem... You are good... I'm surprised no one has reviewed this till now... i would rate it at least 95%