Solstice - Between Flesh

A small scene I wish to improve in anyway. (I have terrible grammar) Any help or thoughts are appreciate!

The Solstice sword was plunged deeply into the beasts chest, piercing it completely through. As I stared mercilessly into the creatures defeated eyes, I saw sorrow emerge in their reflection, which did not transpire from pain but rather the beast's rushing thoughts of it's existence . From birth it has felt nothing but lust for evil, a undying thirst that no act could quench, a deep burning desire aching to be satisfied in every waking moment. What purpose did my existence have, was it merely to seek fulfillment in my natures desires?  I've created nothing but anguish and destruction for centuries. My existence served no meaning and was better to not be at all, realized the creature as it exhaled it's final breath, falling to the ground. I withdrew my blade from the creature and crouched towards what remained. "You are mistaken fallen adversary, your existence was my entire purpose". 

Reviews

[David Kennedy]

I have written a few scenes like this before; a kind of introspection into the moment of a murder, or a kill, or the end of a battle or whatever you would like to call it. The character seems to have a heck of a lot going on in his head at the time, and its important to make it very clear what it is he is feeling at the moment when he has to deliver that killing blow. You might also think about delving a bit more into the descriptive imagery when it comes to what is happening outside his head as well, going into how the creature slid off his blade, the sound it made, the smell of its blood, that sort of thing.

As the Spartans say; A good start!

[StellerStar]

Dude thank you! This really gives me a lot to think about and consider, was really feeling stuck on how to refine the scene and what feels absent or not clear enough. I couldn't have asked for better comment.