Colours of Love

This is the first poem I have written in a LONG time, and I am NO poet. So please don't read <3! (It's also my first poem, ever.)

When I'm with you my heart stops,

my mind freezes,

thoughts cease to come,

and all I see is you in a whirl of colours.

 

I'd say something if I could,

but I can't.

I'm not thinking in sentances,

not even words.

All I can do is feel within me a flash of colours.

 

And it kills me to know,

that I can't share the colours,

inspired by you.

But I guess if any words could ever match,

my feelings inside,

that these words would be,

I,

love,

You.

 

Author's Note

If you DID read it (against my wishes :P) pls, constructive criticism!

Reviews

[Lily]

The more you come attached to Donny the more heartbreak you will get. He's old-fashioned. Maybe you should slow down.. Try writing about other things first. Oh.. and seems kind of like prose that's in the form of poetry.