The Mind

Cognition darkens with every note,

A screech, a scream, a souls afloat,

Lost memories take air from your throat,

A mind’s your thoughts a life has wrote.

You think.

You breathe.

You understand.

A maze of confusion for you to withstand.

My nerves engage in conversation. 

I sit.

I kill;

Imagination.

I ache and pain; avoid creation,

Create a thought from pure frustration,

Repress the mess of my temptation,

These acts are caused by limitation.

Outside the box, a dream has died.

A vision.

A scare.

A twist of the knife.

For what you’ve seen has been altered inside.

A horror.

A game.

A terrible space.

My darling, 

The mind;

Is a dangerous place.

Reviews

[Kaylor Mason]

That's true . . . D****t that's very true

[Chesney W.]

this is so true ..... thank you for such an amazing write!

[Sarah Redigan]

i honestly have no words .. this is breath taking !

[closed..acct]

Whoa! This is really amazing.
Love the rhyme shceme and flow.
Like the darkness of it. awesome!

[james]

this is really good

[Laura E. Aranda]

My darling,

The mind;

Is a dangerous place.



it seems the whole poem was adapted around this verse

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

Dearie me, I absolutely love this. It's got a cadence to it that I understand very well. Just makes you want to chant it over and over again.
The rhyme only helps with that factor. It's simplistic, yet genius. And I'm definitely going to read more of your stuff.

Best poem I've seen in a while, In my opinion of course.

-Marie Riorden-

[behind.the.lights]

Just reading a few pieces of your work, I've noticed you have a very sophisticated simplicity. Your poems create real images easily understood by the reader (or at least in my case). They have depth, but are just scraping by as understandable to the common mind. They do go above and beyond basics of poetry and many have a very romantic tint that goes nowhere near the borderline of cheesey. Your poems really end with a ring that lingers, this one especially. This is my absolute favorite poem of yours so far. Thanks for posting!

[Vertigoingnowhere]

wow this is awesome! i love this. Good job!! :))) mind checking out some of my work? thanks :)))

[Cancelled]

Love it!