IF

If the moment we’re in can end our song,

Then a moment with you will do the same.

If the words you said were wrong all along,

Then it is better I forget your name.

If the emptiness you call home moves on,

Then I will reside there with an open heart.

If, when falling; the darkness is withdrawn,

Then tears will show my forever depart.

If the clouds pile up; too strong to hold,

Then my heaven with you may live again.

If my heart would beat and never grow old,

Then into your arms is where I’ll descend.

Reviews

[Annabelle Lee]

THis was magnificent! so sweet and emotional!

[Ali Guerra]

so well written, it just flows so beautifully. :]

[TC Dunn]

love the last line... so beautiful.

[Kaylor Mason]

Cool. I like how you used the word IF as a launching point for the whole piece, subtly questioning with each thought.

[closed..acct]

This one is really amaazing as well.
Love the flow and rhyme scheme.
You have talent.

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

"If the moment we're in can end our song,
Then a moment with you will do the same.
If the words you said were wrong all along,
Then it is better I forget your name."
Has some kind of tune to it, almost as if I've heard it before. All of it seems like that, but I know I haven't seen it before in the same way. You've got quite a talent that I see, you know? I should read more still. Is there any that you'd request?

-Marie Riorden-

[child_of_music]

your poem is amazing. you make it so the people reading this, can feel the feelings you did or still feel. what I got out of it: there are a million "what if's" in the world, but to the what if's you can take a stand.

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Nice writing.... I like whole poem... Keep it up... God bless you!

[Maryum Mazhar]

:O 100/100

[Morrigan Nicole]

"clouds pile up; too strong to hold"

i love it!