The Traveller

Some random poem I did long time ago xD It's quite bad ^^"

The Path of Light
The Valley of Darkness
Both unseen by the Traveler
Who only keeps his eyes on the ground
Walking forward with careful steps
But not looking ahead
His legs take him to an unknown place
Just walking
Constantly walking

When Darkness comes
The Traveler stops
Unable to see his feet
He hesitates
Trying to wrestle the fear within him
And yet he keeps on walking
Following the Light of his Heart

Where his journey will end
He doesn't know
But he will never stop walking
Constantly walking
Until his feet are unable to support
Tired and sore
The body weak and wasted
Collapses to the ground

Reviews

[poetic soul]

perfect and brilliant picture of a real traveler!!! very profound!!!

[Kia-chan!]

This reminded me of the story of the foolish travelor (from fruits basket) for some reason. I wonder if it's because it's called the travelor....

[~ Stefanny ~]

Thanks for the heads up ^^

[mcg03002]

Very nice work. I would open up the edit feature and change keep to keeps in line 4.