last candle

lit

candle

guarded

 

circled

 

navigated through

 

sleeping dragons

woken witches

animated villians

 

as wick rose 

cat-tails

from brackish waters

frost i only remember

 

scent

of

flame

to weak wax

 

the aroma of an 

apocolypse

nastalgic

pepper and garlic salad

if one wanes

wax

the (an)other 

 

i've watched the tides

jetties still

break, each thought

every minute

 

i know it's not just me

feeling fish captured-words learned

"caught it so skin it"

 

could i shiver

my

cavier

loose?

so valuable you...

when there is no upstream

giving up doesn't seemso...

 

 

 

candle

extuingished

on the same river bank

i travel light

 

i think of wishes

too heavy for you

i will walk

or

be silent rock

let your walk

tread upon me

one way or another

 

there's no

bettering you

Reviews

[M Breen]

Bang bing bang. The images and allusions come in fast and slippery and then, the end, the K.O. Thought provoking and brave, with wit and emotion. Really appreciated this piece. Thanks.

I wonder if you meant the "a" in "nastalgic''. Perhaps.

[Steeven]

yes it was intentional but, thank you, any edits are welcome.
and thanks for the taking time and commenting on actual areas of poem...much in debt.

[.]

~ this heartsong is to die for...

[Steeven]

no. it is not. there are flaws and follies of linguistics.
but i am sincere in saying that a comment from you is-as always-tremendous.

[.]

~ hmmm... now my poor brain which knows english as a second language is quite flummoxed... is this not a heartsong or is it not a heartsong that is to die for ? ... if you mean it is a heartsong but not one to die for, then i humbly disagree with you... if you mean it's not heartsong, then i humbly apologize... for not getting it... i try to but i fail too... :P

[.]

* a heartsong at all

[Steeven]

yes heart-song. to die for is debatable
:)

[.]

~ oh... what a relief... i almost went back to kindergarten to re-learn the language... :P ~ as for debatable...in serahland...no such debates take place...my word is final... :P ~ however, this might not be the case in steevenland... i understand... :)

[Steeven]

;)
i call it whirld `o' steve.

[.]

~ haha... yes, will do... it's quite a whirl pool... no doubt about that... :P