dilute me

i need you to wear me out;

thin me down

                        dilute me�"

i’m feeling thick

                   heavy

                   bloated.

i feel sluggish, swine-like,

            molasses stillness;

round

                        global

            obtuse.

 

i shouldn’t weigh this much...(

            it’s enough to pull us

                        both down.

Reviews

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~ haha... a brilliantly written micro epic... unforgettable... incredible word play on display... and, i loved the title a lot... :) p.s. sorry my sense of humour is very black... :P

[Steeven]

no, no apology needed. there have been a few things that have meant to be funny and just caused people to call them steevisms. apparently i have an "odd" sense of humour

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~ haha... what a relief... am glad i'm not the only odd one out... :P