Sword Of Blue Stone

Look deep into yourself and see what you can find...

In this dungeon
I struggle up three steps
First one is easy
As easy as a breath
The second one crumbles
Beneath my breaking knees
But I over come
As I always do
Finally 
Stepping up from the third step
I feel a sense of relief

When that old silver sword 
Comes down in front of me
It lays on the cold concrete 
Of my dungeon floor
Lifting the shiny gold handle
With blue sapphires in crested in it   
I cut away the strings 
And I let my voice be heard

Suddenly I look up
And there is a little window
I walk over and look out
At the beautiful summer sky
Light blue with white fluffy clouds
I look down at the forest below
The sight of on going trees
Growing tall, strong and proud
I feel a sense of achievement 
Growing in my chest
And my heart beats faster and harder
Filling my ears with the sound of freedom
I just want to smile

I feel like a child
Waiting in line
To go on a new ride
The nervous excitement 
Of what  is awaiting me next
I spare no time
I wait only as long as I must
I sign away my past
And build up a new future

Today I start my life again
New and improved
Let red cars drive me through
Let blue swords cut the chains 
That bonded me to you

Let my life begin a new

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

I want to pick you up and squeeze you!! ...I know that sounds a bit funny, but this poem is both heartbreaking and adorable in the way you craft a scene that spans dreams and reality all rolled into one!! If this IS a break up poem, I am sorry for the one who receives such a message from you, and to never have been able to find that connection to such a beautiful heart like yours, if so. It's a beautiful piece, and at one point I felt like carrying you up these stairs, and in the same sense.... I was waiting to see how YOU would do it. Even in poem, you are inspirational by way of our own mental prowess to push on, and I LOVE the way you tell a story in unconventional ways!! : ) Awesome...... Beautiful Stat. xoxo -Your Mark

[Felicity's Eve]

You should be really proud of this. It's incredible ^.^

Like Broken said, the sense of rebirth you have here is something awe-inspiring. You wrote it in a way where that feeling seems almost...tangible. :)

This is fantastic. Keep up the incredible work. :)

Seriously. Keep writing. ^^

100/100

[StatAnimalLover]

thank you

[Felicity's Eve]

:)

[Joshua J. Lowe]

I like how I was able to visualize this story-poem. I felt a sense of triumph and renewed life coming from this. Well done, Stat.

[StatAnimalLover]

Thank you very much.

[Broken Soul]

The sense of rebirth you have portrayed here is great. The imagery you use here lets us basically live this rebirth with you and experience it fully. Also, it has a weird little flow to it that keeps us interested and wanting more. To be honest, it deserves more reviews than just one.

100/100

[StatAnimalLover]

Aww thank you so much. I am pretty proud of that poem and I'm glad to see someone else likes it too!!! ^w^ *hugs*