Driving in Torrance at 9 PM

I wrote this for my English 476 class. I really hope it doesn't suck because I was trying to emulate Philip Levine.

 

I didn’t know

El Camino has a new parking structure

Or that apartment building now has

Rainbow colored lights and

Where’d that 24 Hour Fitness come from?

I flipped off my old Catholic school

As I drove by. Thanks for the memories and

All the broken zippers on my backpacks

Not to mention all of my blessed,

Cruel-mouthed classmates and the uptight teachers.

My car sits in front of the house, and I want to go out.

Myspace, Facebook, Writerscafe, and Youtube take me places that

My car just doesn’t. But it’s 10:30 PM and I miss

Staring at Palos Verdes at night when it looks like part

Of the stars in the sky are compressed to the southern horizon.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Forgive me, Philip, for I know not your poetic style.

Reviews

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

I like the nostalgia that you give here along with personal input that gives the reader's brain
something to play with as well. Very funny even when it seems that you're not trying.

"Where'd that 24 Hour Fitness come from?
I flipped off my old Catholic school
As I drove by. Thanks for the memories and
All the broken zippers on my backpacks
Not to mention all of my blessed,
Cruel-mouthed classmates and the uptight teachers."

I wished it were longer though, but it got it's point across. Good write.....

[Drew Wade]

this is so great. you should call it ode to social sites. hahaha. good detail, good memories in the detail.