Loving a Dream

This sucks.

 

Don’t you wish dreams were real?

The green sparks fly

Walking on water and air

And nobody can die

 

Your soul is free to speak

Many tongues yet all understand

And many a night

Do I dream of the touch of your hand

 

Pick up your sword and yield it

It’s time to fight

Follow your heart

And hold on tight

 

I’m so frustrated

I want to punch a wall

My soul wants to be understood

And I don’t know it at all

 

I want you to be real

I want you to be here

Like you once were

Wiping a tear

 

Don’t die

Not when I can save you

No, you can’t be dead

This is too bad to be true

 

I’m living a fantasy

Who wants reality?

It’s so much better here

Just love, you and me

 

I’m drowning and it’s taking over

My armor is weighing me down

Before love was my only weapon

Once, when you were around

 

I want to save you

I can’t fear the way I feel

But you’re gone and I wake up alone

Because this life and love is not real

 

 

 

Reviews

[Lexi Nicole]

I love this! I know the feeling quite well...Waking up from a dream and wishing it were all real. Dreams really are so much better than reality most of the time. You did a wonderful job with this. There's so much emotion in it. Great work!

-Howl

[Aekmy]

"I'm living a fantasy
Who wants reality?
It's so much better here"

O-mazingness

[Kaitlyn]

I agree with all other reviews, both of those lines speak to me. It's as if the were written for me to read, to give me inspiration. I do agree as well that at times the rhyming seems a bit forced, but mine usually does too.

[Anne Hill]

"I'm living a fantasy
Who wants reality?
It's so much better here"
That line really speaks to me, probably because i have felt that way so many times. I think I like your poetry better than some of your stories.

[Drew Wade]

Okay, the only thing I have to say bad about this is that sometimes the rhyming is forced.. Other than that, I think there are moments of brilliance in it. Here's one:

"Pick up your sword and yield it
It's time to fight
Follow your heart
And hold on tight"

that's inspiring.