A Day in the Life

A poem I wrote in grade 9 that's now been edited and re-written a little.

Nasty lies that spread around
Pushing and pushing until you lay on the ground
Neglected for the day you break to cry
Then continuously abused until you feel you could die
Rumors pretending to be true

So, what if there is no end,
No help from a friend,
Nothing to rely on
Another day trying to find something to hold onto life for

It could be too late
Time gone, no time to run away
Can anyone understand
The pain burning inside?
You don't want to try
With depression pushing through your thoughts;
through your head;
Robbing every space of your mind
Turning to anger - an unfortunate vulnerability.

Life could just stop
When you pick up the knife
Death could just begin
When you're alone to see no other way
Now here thou lay
The blood flowing around you
Was this your fault,
Or the ones that hurt you?

Reviews

[Carrion.]

i really like this. its depressing, its telling a a well know story. I'm sure that everyones experienced the false rumours, spreading fast and and the people hearing them cant help BUT believe them.
Then the bullying begins.
Its a very good poem to explain that.
Keep writing(:

[Jibin]

Little depressed write, i think, since i couldn't say its beautiful. But as a writing, it got the best views and tastes.
"Life could just stop
When you pick up the knife
Death could just begin
When you're alone to see no other way"

Two brilliant concept, and these are my favorite lyrics. When life seems like hell, nothing to rely on and our friends, who have to help us, is going in another way.
I know that will fill darkness in our life and live.
Anyway thanks for sharing such a piece.
:)

[A Risen Heroine.]

I like it a lot...
I can kind of relate...
You did great in 9th grade...

~A Fallen Heroine~

[LivingDeath]

First view! XD Yup I'm a stalker lol jk but wow, grade 9 eh.. You were a depressed little girl werent you lol you wanna know why I think so.. You hadnt met a friend like me yet xD haha just kidding. But now back to the poem. I felt the flow could of been a little bit better, but for writing this in grade 9 it isnt bad at all. Good concept behind it though. If death was the cause of you or the ones around you. I liked it. I too have often pondered the same thing back in my depressed days. ^_^
-Ty