Mnemophobia

To pull the trigger on these memories,
Serenading me in the darkness from reality
Denying a past life, a past day of long ago time
Wishing to close my eyes and see something good
To not have to fear the mistakes we've made
Where's the key so I can throw this all away
Lock up these nightmares, conceal the fake dreams
Not as strong as I pretend to be, not strong enough to fight
Some days of dim light and reminiscent of what won't hold back
The war storming through the corners of my brain
Firearms the main attention to my thoughts
The blazing guns of negativity and pain
An impending doom hanging on every memory,
Every terrible thought,
Every foreboding feeling,
Every intensified image.
A mixture of reality and dream
When no longer a difference is seen with eyes closed
When we walk through each day, with our memories and dreams,
Telling us lies and telling us fatal flaws
We thought we were stronger than this,
But it seems we're the ones fragile to touch
The breakable glass that's cracking at the slightest push
Afraid to sleep, to close our eyes
What are we fighting for?

Reviews

[Libby McKeown]

It was hard to read this. It has a lot of cliche, and seems like every melancholy poem I have ever read. That being said, the poem can still be saved. It needs some trimming, and how could you make this piece into something no one has ever done before, said before? You have talent; you owe it to yourself to reshape your work until it really represents what you're about. Just my humble estimation.

[Jupiter Jazz]

Wow, that's deep. Very strong feelings come through this. Yosh!

[Hello, Goodbye]

you express these expressions with a resolute conviction that pulls the reader in and makes him feel everything that must be felt.. 'What are we fighting for?' indeed.

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

I loved the imagery in this piece and how well you've managed to describe the intensity of very deep thoughts. Your words flow beautifully and paint vivid pictures of the things we can't avoid, no matter how hard we try...wonderful work = )

Creative and moving. Very thought provoking, each line draws news questions with the imagery you use. Very nice work.

[Daytonight]

I love the last line! Keep up the great work!

[SinnerInspired]

Damn this is really nice It speaks to me ya kno? I love it *thumbs up*

[Jvl narasimharao]

Dear Starrynights, This is really a highly thought provoking and introspective poem.Well keep on writing
yours lovingly,
JVL NARASIMHA RAO
INDIA

[Layla Anne Massaro]

What a great poem! So powerful! Keep writing! :)))

[Thea]

I'm sorry.............................But it's just WOW! This is a amazing!!! :)