Distance

Distance

A Poem by Starrie09
"

break the distance

"
There is a distance
between me and them.
Its far and wide
its overwhelmingly deep.
I come to break this distance
down with this light.
I hold it in my hand
for them to see.
They lift their eyes.
I'm here to break the distance so
I can show them...God.
Welcome to the Light.
Your free.

© 2013 Starrie09


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Freestyle yet I feel no rhyme scheme? You should count the meter of each line and look at each ending word. Whether you make 1 rhyme with 3, there should be a cycle. This needs some work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Starrie09

10 Years Ago

Yeah sure. Thanks, I might not be perfect but I do want to get better.
justjenn_2u

10 Years Ago

I will personally help on this one. I sincerely want to extend some tips.
Starrie09

10 Years Ago

Im open to any advice you could give me.

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Added on November 6, 2013
Last Updated on November 6, 2013
Tags: God, distance

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Starrie09
Starrie09

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Im here. Im here.

A Poem by Starrie09