A State of Liberation?

I’m asleep in my own mind

Self and body control awareness

More like, stuck in paralysis.

Refueling, renewing,

Unjust, undoing.

Keep the membrane in tact don’t complain,

Cus a b***h like me is going insane.

Nuts and bolts,

Feel volts of an electronic wire

Set on fire,

Explode, don’t go
Curiosities got the control.

Excuse me,

I’m like you

And in case you wanna mentally relate with me,

Too.

Comes like a click to a channel

That repeats repeats, same story no end, and then again….

Repeat repeat don’t leave me please

My controller’s gone to s**t, let’s revive it with a hit

Hit, it works again.

I have so many options what a mortal sin.

Wait, I like this show

But then it reverts, reverts, first to go.

And I bang on the button

The static cutting little truth, much infusing youth,

 something that I paid for nothing.

But the repairman’s here,

And my state of mind is in the clear.

But his presence makes it to simple to bear.

But f**k it, I’d rather not have that T.V.

In the land of the free,

My state of mind is being me.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the analogy here to the tv...my mind has its channels that just keep repeating and repeating and repeating.

read my work if you want to know me as more than just nuts and bolts and electricity...

i like how this flows, so unforced...feels like rhyme comes naturally to you..

you don't have to painstakingly put pieces together with form...when that happens, the pieces sound forced and stiff.

i like this lots, and am going to visit some more of your work.
and hell, we all sin.

and if others don't like it, they can watch a different show.
jacob

[Starfruitanimal]

thank you again, usually words do come naturally to me. appreciate your comment !

[Epipsychologist]

It's a little confusing at the beginning, but I like the motif of the remote control being like a broken mind, rerunning the same things over, or like the mind being controlled by the T.V. remote. And I especially like the last couplet, "In the land of the free, My state of mind is being me."

[Starfruitanimal]

i thank you very much