Our love you severed.

I wont cry, 

not now not ever.

With our ties,

your about to sever.

You gave me flower,

they bloomed this year.

You was my all,

My first love my dear.

I sit on the floor,

while you just stand.

Is this how  it all ends,

a knife in your hand.

I don't recognize you no more,

Your eyes there dark.

Your mouth in a smile,

You look like shark.

I didn't cry,

not then not ever.

My life you ended,

Our love you severed.

Author's Note

heheee getting into poetry. i suppose i'll get better in time.

Reviews

[Mikayla Rasmussen]

THAT WAS GREAT I DONT THINK YOU CAN GET BETTER THAN WHERE YOU ARE ALREADY. I REALLY ENJOYED IT, I COULD SEE THE PICTURE IN MY MIND.

[London]

excellent

[Babieegirl]

Omg, so dark. Great write. Something that would make a great movie clip.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Has a dark tone that I love:)

[TJ]

First try? Very good, much better than mine. I love how we are left to wonder just how much of this is metaphor and how much is literal.
Great job.

[Sukriti Suki]

This is nicely written. Just keep writing and don't be afraid to experiment.

[joshua deathdealer]

Nice write Star!!

[brenda]

lol you are good reminded me a little about romeo and juliet except darker nice write !:)

[Maimai]

love it (:

[triplev]

*like*