With A Kiss

Letting go

Times move on as I stand still,

Sadly enough I didn't get my fill

All I wanted was unconditional love,

You never gave that so now I'm free as a dove

I gather I will let you go as I have no choice,

It's too bad that it ended with me having no voice

If I would of been able to have a say in this,

I would of simply said I love you with a kiss.

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

Awww. Poignant, touching, with that nimble touch of a lightsome spirit skipping away through a meadow.

One indeed has to stay light on one's feet in matters of the heart, as so many are in a roil of hide 'n' seek, and it's touch and go to find the loving soul who'll stay and look at you with a steady adoring gaze.

The spirit of this sweet poem is a kiss blown on the breeze, floating to find its true home.

[Emily]

Nicely put. There's a lot of good things in this poem. Well done.

But to be nitpicky - in the last line it should grammatically be "would have" not "would of." A lot of people confuse that because of the conjunction "would've." But I could have read the line wrong, so don't be afraid to correct my correction!

it's really cute ^^
a sweet, you portray the feelings really well
-nice write-
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[Stacy]

I forgot to mark it as a poem.

[Daiku Maryu]

Very cute poem. I can see how the person saying that feels.

But why is it marked as a story?