"content"

without worry

Today is the day I let go of fear, raising my glass with a sobering cheer.

 

Today is the day I hope we all see the truth, no disbelief or cover ups- innocent as the youth.

Honest I go exposing the hurt, may the balance of my sins lie here on this dirt.

 

 For the judge with many flaws cannot carve away my sight, Because I’d rather bleed out on earth... than to contaminate...my after life. 

Reviews

[Osephyr]

Why did you choose to write this poem without lines? I can see that you sort of separated it into different lines but it is hard to visualize and distinguish the rhyme and rhythm that I believe is present in your poem with only hyphens to show line break. Too add onto that, why did you end the poem with a quotation mark followed by name? Honestly it appears like this was a poem that was written on another app or software that you pasted onto the site and didn't bother to organize or look over. I think you may want to organize this poem because it is hard to analyse and review. Good luck to you!

[Samuel Robert Sands]

i write as i feel and think and in the speed at which it takes me to express my thoughts and feelings i do not spend alot of time fooling with it ..i just get it out..i use microsoft word and when im done i copy my work and paste it to this app. again i do not spend time correcting and perfecting my writings unless it was for a class in which it is mandatory and since its my work i post it because if not it will be forever lost egarless if its perfected or not..p.s.i need no luck but thank you

[Samuel Robert Sands]

After considering our post I fixed my writing. Thank You.

[Osephyr]

Great, I'm glad you found my review helpful; great work with your changes, it's much better.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Because I’d rather bleed out on earth... than to contaminate...my after life. "
So relatable these lines are to me. Realistic composition.

[Samuel Robert Sands]

Connections are conformation

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes indeed☺