You're such a lovely cyclone

Stormy Love

Hey girl!
I love the way you whirl,
and swirl,
so deep inside my heart.
you're such a lovely cyclone,
as you tear my mind apart.
seething lava in my veins,
tsunami in my breast,
a hurricane that's gone insane,
an earthquake that won't rest.
your tremors how they move me,
I simply can't resist,
so I sprout wings,
sweet golden things,
and melt into your kiss.

Reviews

[Anicca]

I adore this.... Its amazing. I love the way you have taken something as ugly as natural disasters and made me smile by turning them into something so beautiful. The pace of this was incredibly fast which worked well, I dont know if that was the intention but pretend that it was for a 10 out of 10 from me!! Juxtaposition at its finest.

[Coyote Poetry]

Woman who are like cyclones. Are hard to hold down. I like this poem. The description of a woman is amazing. The poem had no wasted words. Just a powerful and outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Vaidehi]

A super poem! I just love this one, so breezy and cute!

[Hayley]

Sweet! All the descriptions are believable and they work for the mood of the poem. Nice job!

[Kyla H]

This is so well written, Sounds like it could be an awesome song.

[Sukriti Suki]

this made me smile...some great comparisons here!

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perfect rhyme and meter...not forced at all..loved it

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

I'm luvin' the theme of weather to create your poem. "I love the way you twirl", very visual. My fav. line. "You're such a lovely cyclone as you tear my heart apart".

[Tasha]

WOW, i really enjoyed this! I loved your comparison to a girl and cyclone... very original! :)