If I became you, and you became me ...

I was feeling so low when I woke up today I had to climb an 18 ft extension ladder to get up to the basement.

If I became you, and you became me,

Would we be each other?

Would we be together?

Would we have some fun?

Would we have one heart?

Would we be as one?
Would we live in ecstasy?
Would we be free?

Would you lend you credit card to me?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Everything but the last line. Credit cards must go away. Can't pay cash. You don't need it anyway. I believe in the logic of. "Treat people like you want to be treated." A fun poem to read. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Sukriti Suki]

hahahah...I was in deep thought and the last line just cracked me up..sometimes all we need is a bit of laughter.

[Audrey Howitt]

I like it though I think not as well as other poems of your that I have read. The last line seems trite and not in the same vein as what came before--but maybe that was the point?

[Hayley]

All the questions were very thought-provoking and each spoke for itself, until the last line, which made me laugh. All that deep stuff, then a credit card. I agree with Coyote: credit cards must go away! :)

[Ladysue]

lol..this made me smile...

[Jenny Nelson]

Love that last line. Love the whole piece, actually. At first read it's light and fun, but when one thinks about it, it does make you wonder who you are, what are you like and why. Would someone want to be you? Why, why not? (And I agree with Coyote, we should stop using credit cards.) Nice write!

[LA Lorena]

LOL! A clever write.

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LOL..what more could you ask for?

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

Very unique; catchy phrasing;
Would YOU lend your credit card to me?