I suffer from manic depression and battle horrible thoughts daily. I once had a deacon tell me that did I think God was so unloving and unforgiving that should a person take their life they go to hell. That caught me by surprise. I recall asking that it did state somewhere in the Bible that it is against God's will to harm and take one's life isn't it? He replied not by scripture but by rational and logic in that he would like to think that if the person is so out of their mind that they are not aware of their act then God would forgive the person of taking their life. I am not trying to argue the right or wrong of suicide. I am just throwing out a unique position that a Christian presented to me some years back. I tend to or try to write in a way that provokes or invokes thought so hopefully this post will do the same and not just bring to surface religious fanatical banter about how wrong I am.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Hi, Thank you for your interpretation, and you are right sometimes lost evil spirits try to sneak in.. read moreHi, Thank you for your interpretation, and you are right sometimes lost evil spirits try to sneak into bodies while persons are sleeping or dozing off, and that is when they try to infiltrate suicidal thoughts almost behind person's knowledge, unless they are detected on time, then they do not have harmful effects on human bodies.
The reason evil spirits are jealous of living persons is because evil spirits do not have physical bodies and that is the reason they try to recruit living persons into suicide because the miserable evil spirits want company for eternity, so what they do is they try to force it when they try to posses persons into suicide.
Really liked the poem, the feeling of constantly losing can be deflating to the point death is an escape. Especially liked the part about a hand rising from below, great work.
Quiet desperation, it's a vivid portrayal. I just read the book, The Great Divorce, by CS Lewis, and your poem reminded me of some of the imagery in that book. You may want to check out that work for ideas. In the book, it describes people who choose to live in hell even when given a choice. Often it seems, we create our own hell around us while we are alive and not even realize it. I think you kind of capture that notion here as well. Enjoyed your poem.
The pain and desperation of a soul drowning in anguish are well portrayed here, along with the Siren's song of death. There are a lot of dark voices that whisper dark things to troubled people which is why everyone should take anyone's mention of suicide as VERY serious. I believe that for every demonic voice that whispers to a depressed person, there is the voice of Christ, speaking through various (and often unconventional) formats, pleading with them to just hang on. Tragically, humans have the free will to decide upon which set of voices to listen to.
Hmm Dear writer, there is a big possibility that you are right, but how about where she recognizes w.. read moreHmm Dear writer, there is a big possibility that you are right, but how about where she recognizes was is happening to her and she starts asking for help, will that put still put her in the category of a broken soul, because she is only near the edge in the monologue of the poem.
Thank you dear writer for your review and interpretation, I really do appreciate it.
The poem is amazing in its potrayal of a soul in distress crying out for help and rescue. Thanks for the insight into the chaotic and desperate psyche of those so possessed and unfortunate enough to commit self-annihilation. Do they even understand the damning implications. ...I wonder.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Hi dear writer
I've seen your work and is definitely better that mine so your comment.. read moreHi dear writer
I've seen your work and is definitely better that mine so your comment and review are very valuable because you do know what you are talking about.
I really do like your interpretation and the words you used you described it.
Thank You
Anika
8 Years Ago
Anika...Thank you for such a heart felt compliment. But we all are people striving to write somethi.. read moreAnika...Thank you for such a heart felt compliment. But we all are people striving to write something that will make a mark on this hard as stone, difficult to impress world and words are all we have. Each with our own inimitable and unique style and I very appreciate yours. Looking forward to read more from you.
The ultimate act of trying to escape a desperate and forlorn situation ... the urgent plea to an entity unseen as our sorrowful calls fall on deaf ears.
A very accurate and honest description of what it feels like and the situation that so many find themselves in.
So many times have I wondered just how much I could take before I would break. So many times my resolve had cracked and given in to the easier alternatives, yet so many times has the Arch angel reached out it's hand and caught me as I fell. For some reason the angels refuse to let go of me.
My desperation may not be due to the way I see the world or the way I see myself, but I can non the less sympathize with those caught in a downward spiral, surrounded by deafened ears and uncaring hearts.
May your words open the eyes of others to the unseen plight of those around them.
Thank you dear writer for your incredible poetic and valuable interpretation.
I remem.. read moreThank you dear writer for your incredible poetic and valuable interpretation.
I remember a few year back when I was in high school
That I heard some of my friends talk about the subject
And that the reason they wanted to do it
Was because they wanted their parents to suffer and feel bad about their non existance
Because their parents couldn't understand their teen behavior that what was going on through their minds.
For that reason I knew that it was something else trying to encourage them and not their parents
And That is why I wrote the following line
"She might grasp grip
She looks at her face in the mirror and
Sees an ugly with no body
A spirit who might try to posses her"
I love what you wrote here:
"So many times have I wondered just how much I could take before I would break. So many times my resolve had cracked and given in to the easier alternatives, yet so many times has the Arch angel reached out it's hand and caught me as I fell. For some reason the angels refuse to let go of me."
8 Years Ago
So very true, whatever the reason, it is most certainly dark hands at work when it comes to the mind.. read moreSo very true, whatever the reason, it is most certainly dark hands at work when it comes to the mind being swayed to take the easier way out.
The fact that so many teens seem to use it as a cruel kind of tantrum or see it as a way to hurt others, rather than being in a situation where they feel trapped, make it so much harder for those with "legitimate reasons" to seek help.
Don't get me wrong, there is no valid excuse for it ... ever. My mind, it seems, is just not strong enough to cope with a broken body so I constantly search for a "Off Switch". Yet here I am ... and as they say, there is a purpose with everything ... such as being able to read the beautiful words of others, each a masterpiece in it's own right.
8 Years Ago
Thank you dear writer, I like this
"cruel kind of tantrum"
it makes se.. read moreThank you dear writer, I like this
"cruel kind of tantrum"
it makes sense because in reality it is their parents that physically gave them life
I love the imagery in this write... great word choices. Very good work my friend :)
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you dear Aaron for your valuable interpretation, and am looking forward to reading more of you.. read moreThank you dear Aaron for your valuable interpretation, and am looking forward to reading more of your work.