Sweet Desire

“If something comes to life in others because of you, then you have made an approach to immortality.” ― Norman Cousins

You're the shining star on the dark sky,

You're the green leaves that take me high,

You're the sweet bliss-

You're my chocolate strawberries before each kiss.

 

You bring music to my ears,

You motivate me to face fears...

You are the light in my life,

You inspire me to be a good wife.

 

You are my tender love after a rough day,

You are not the sun,but all its golden rays.

You are the sweet breeze,I feel when you're gone

You're the bird that comforts me when I sit and mourn

 

You are my memory,you are my age,

Ashamed I could not stop,cancer in its final stage.

Years pass,but you are still you.

I still iron your clothes,I still polish your shoe.

 

You are the reason life is and was good,

You are the reason I turned out as I should.

You are my love,my chocolate,my cake,

You are solely the reason,I even started to bake.

 

You are precious and you always will be,

Anticipating our day in heaven,can't wait to see.

You are here when my hair is gray,

You are here to fulfill the dreams we didn't say.

 

Life was limited,but the love last,

Thoughts of you,my heart palpitates fast.

You are the covers on a rainy day,

You  are the butterflies in my stomach that sway.

You are why I believe in magic,

You are why I think life is tragic.

You are why I have no regrets,

You are why in solitude I refuse to fret.

Reviews

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Another beautiful write! It seemed as though there were two people talking as Antonio Hernandez said.
Beautifully written.

Your's truly Kaze~

[Talesha]

That was the intent :) Thanks again :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your welcome. :)

[Praveeta]

Truly sensational! Thanks for sharing your piece with us.

[Talesha]

My writing is nothing without the appreciation from kind reviewers like you. Thank you for reading :)

[Praveeta]

Thanks for the compliment. It was a pleasure reading your poem.

[Antonio Hernandez]

I almost feel like there are two speakers in the poem (one who has died and one suffering from their loss) and that their love for each other is so strong that they almost sound like one.

"You are my memory,you are my age" seems to stand out to me more than any other line not because it contains two metaphors instead of one but because together, they seem to work together in establishing this wholesome mood of nostalgia.

The only way I can see it improving is to use stronger imagery and it will be perfect.

[Talesha]

Antonio,thank you for reading and you interpreted it exactly how I wrote it. Thanks also for the advice :)

[Scott Metro]

You're my chocolate strawberries before each kiss.
wow...that conjures up such beautiful images..in fact this whole write is amazing.
Sad..but so very loving.....I am your fan !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
So pretty...MY ADMIRATION....
Scottxoxo

[Talesha]

Scott,I wholeheartedly smiled a huge grin just now. Thank you so much.xoxo

[Scott Metro]

It's my pleasure..honestly
Scott

[Penny]

Hmmm... quite personal. Almost has your name over it. Very nyc.

[Talesha]

:) Thanks Pennyy.

[Penny]

My pleasure. :-)

[Frieda P]

You're on a roll Talesha...you had me at 'chocolate strawberries before each kiss' and it just got sweeter!

[Talesha]

aha oh thank you Frieda ;-)

[Frieda P]

The pleasure was mine, now I want chocolate! :-)

[Talesha]

Lol..I'll ship you some.Or if you ever come to Trinidad,for sure I'll stock the fridge hehe :)

[Frieda P]

Sounds good to moi...how long does it take to get there? :-)

[Talesha]

haha,I really don't know. *hands you virtual chocolate bar*