I remember watching the preacher man perform illusions from his pulpit of make believe he told us stories about living life as a lamb in a world full of wolves that are hunted by the endangered bald eagle from above
Do you really think I believe that God intended for me to hurt when his only begotten son took all illness and sin from this earth?
My Mother died from lung cancer commercials say smoking does that My Grandfather died from congestive heart failure professionals say excessive drinking causes this If this is true then why are both these products still available on local store shelves?
Why? because...
your just another carbon unit working to pay on your slave taxes a living debt that we pass on to our children every child born is born owing the government 800 large their bill to be called an American
Now do you understand why at times illegal immigrants piss me off they get the benefit without owing a thing we can't take care of our own and I am tired of taking care of yours
but my faith says it is still my responsibility so I give with a smile and love in my heart still my brain isn't dumb people are get over artists from the perpetual welfare clients to the wealthy who claim insurance fraud
didn't they tell you about America?
we're the original gangsters a melting pot with a whole lot of guns and atomic bombs for fools who try us
ask the one's who have messed with us
We found Saddam in a hole put him on trial in his own country then hung him live on the internet
we put a bullet in Bin Laden's head straight mafia now he'll never have his day in court the war on terror continues empty victories for our fallen heroes of 9/11
Don't let me start preaching about Regan, Bush, Clinton and Obama homeland security would put 3 hot ones in my chest
So put on your Sunday best get on your knees and pray to God give praise and honor to his name preach to me how I am going to hell while you dance on the grave of the evil dead then tell me how how is that an eye for eye ended with the birth and death of Jesus and how vengeance is mine saith the Lord and today we celebrate murder in the first degree
That's right we're the good guys jolly green giants that rule the earth and all others are evil doers
Tell Mr. Preacher man is this the America that God is pleased with? does he see us as living in his son's name explain to me again how we should live as a lamb
a resounding and nonreligious AMEN!!! to every word within this revelatory poetic from the pouting lips of this failing Buddhist~ you nailed it to its own cross~ altruism in tatters~ ambiguity rules the modern day~ what a shambles we have permitted to take root~ bravo to your courage~ your honesty and the wildly captivating force with which you turn that mirror on us all~ BRAVO!
"Tell Mr. Preacher man
is this the America that God is pleased with?
does he see us as living in his son's name
explain to me again how we should live as a lamb"
You referred to my work as "slam" poetry. Well my dear my work doesn't even hold a candle to this. Your syllables get in your face daring people to wake up and serve a purpose as oppose to purposely serving. You took Churchill's "We're the best of a bad lot" and told him to shove it. That being the "best of a bad lot" isn't good enough. Your facts like mortar leaving a crater of truth taking no prisoners. J'adore
I agree with your words. How could six special forces men not capture Bin Laden. Old saying. "Dead man can't tell no tale." I question the way he die. We live in a world where it is hard to find the truth now. The USA is a mockery of rules and laws. I could discuss this for days. Time for us with real vision to help take off the blinders of most of the USA population. A outstanding poem. It will take many brave and strong people to change the way we live. I could budget the balance in one law. Less government and stop all the pension of all government officials.
Coyote
Fantastic. You amaze me everytime that I can find the time to sit down and read one of your marvalous pieces.
You amaze me....you have different perspectives on everything, and you manage to give everybody a taste of them all everytime you write something.
Your mind works in a way I have never been able to see before. You surely could take that somewhere in your life.
I cannot say this enough:This is absolutely AMAZING! I hope you're enjoying this review, because I'm normally a pretty rough critique...100/100, and i hav enever entered that number into the rating box before, just saying :)
*applause*
excellent Troy! this is just a splendid sample of your great heart and brilliant mind!
"your just another carbon unit
working to pay on your slave taxes
a living debt that we pass on to our children
every child born is born owing the government 800 large
their bill to be called an American"
this should be written in caps somewhere to be seen by all people...
This is fantastically written. It was nice to see something outside of my normal point of view being raised Jewish. I truly appreciated reading this. Very well done, my dear.
There were a couple places where "were" should have been "we're," but other than that, this was really good. Your words are strong and powerful.
I have to argue one thing before I end this, though. The reason cigarettes and alcohol are on the shelves is because people buy them...if no one bought them and companies couldn't make a good profit (not to mention the tax), then they wouldn't be stocked. Sadly, there are people willing to buy that stuff.
I don't agree with everything in this poem, but you did an outstanding job of making your point.
I am a free spirit who is extremely open minded and accepting of others differences from my own. I am an open book I find it is much easier living life in the open than hidden lost within the sha.. more..