A Hardboiled Lesson

 

The sun bakes on an egg with no shade

Rolling along

it cracks but never breaks

If a hole in the road awaits

It falls with the kinetic force of hope

Just enough momentum

To deny gravity

rolling up in deviance

this little warrior will never be

supper for the king

the soft underbelly misleads

this little egg

has a pledge, turn, and prestige

let it work it’s magic

hatching just in time

to swan and fly

before it dies in flight

aged ashes take to the wind

swirling like snowflakes

onto the tongues of our younglings

who wobble along a path

we once called our own

now bequeathed to them

with a tree of wisdom

to get through the heat

of those hardboiled lessons

the sun bakes on an egg with no shade

Reviews

[fireblossom]

I don't think many realize where this sort of thing springs from. You've paid a certain price for vision like this. Its no small thing.

I am amazed at the description of the life's terrain, the metaphor made reality. It is reality. This is the description of life in the mind of a great poet.

I love your poetry and you. All the best.

[ANNA]

You sure know how to use your word play. I think the description here is so very captivating.
Your mind is brilliant and at it best!!
Thank you for sharing, sorry I took forever to read such a mind blowing poem!

Much love n respect,
Anna

hatching just in time
to swan and fly
before it dies in flight
aged ashes take to the winds
wirling like snowflakes......love that part! ;)

[Greystone]

Ha! Escape the sun-king, little egg!

The stuff of fairy tales, really, but I loved the metaphors in this poem. Well-written, and good word choice. Is this meant to be prose? And, as usual:

Keep writing.

[Gypsy_Moon]

A nice metaphor write, enjoyed very much. Gypsy_Moon

[Sarah B.]

very nicely paced metaphors, i especially liked: "ashes take to the wind swirling like snowflakes..."

[The DuchessPoet]

What a metaphoric masterpiece! (smiling)
I LOVE IT!
I LOVE IT!
I LOVE IT!

[Gandré]

This was fantastic. Such a great metaphysical poetry. I utterly enjoyed it. wow.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A lesson in deed... a wonderful analogy... we must never give in even when things seem all but over and yet as you state in the end sometimes you need help from others for not everything can be done alone.