I'll Captivate You

this is not meant to be self indulgent

 

Careful

I’ll captivate you

I’ll make you hunger a different view

you’ll want to swim in me

black velvet

silkened sea

a stroke

from my spoken caress

breathless

like the beauty of waves

splashing in the shadow of sunset

leaving you wonder

if this was meant for you

it’s my way

like a current of raging rapids

stick your finger in

get wet

drench your mind in sleekened droplets

moisten your palate

let it palpate

a distant drum of your hearts escape

into the dreamscape I undress within you

lay naked and willing to

receive

what I want to give

open and endless

I can take you there

but be careful what you coax

a potent sea tempers within me

Reviews

[dark and twisty]

interesting..and i like that it's about people getting obsessed with public personalities...probably cos I have a tendency to do so in a rather harmless let's-watch-interview-clips-of-said-actor-til-i-get-sick-of-him kinda way...

But it's especially hard not to be drawn in by actors or musicians or another kind of celebrity, in the way you described it, because of the easy access we have to their lives - there's television, internet, radio, all those websites, blogs and entertainment magazines..and it makes for a nice escapism from the dour realities of our lives...but i guess the problem starts when one's life becomes defined by these celebrities..

aniway, good work, thought provoking...

[Jenna]

Dang man my stuff is nothing NOTHING!!! compared to this. It just fits all so nicely. I wont lie when I looked at your picture I thought man lets go check her out cuz I judged you and thought ok her stuff aint gonna be that good

[Antony]

HMMMM!!!! this is making me think, I will have to read this a few more times, I'm thinking this may be interpreted in several ways, to me it is like someone pulling us in until we are in complete captivity, so sure of their power over us, promising all kinds of good things to tantalize with.
Antony

[Adrian K. Smith]

Perhaps it is from spending too much time out in left field chasing butterflies or staring at tangerine clouds, but I see this piece as neither self-indulgent nor about idolization. It speaks to me of a particular form of seduction, often referred to as coy and those that practice it as coquettes. It is about setting that minor amount of bait, knowing that somebody will bite, that they will take a look, and they will get lost in that sea. There may or may not have been a subtext of sexual innuendo here, but certain lines lead to certain thoughts. No, I see neither self-indulgence nor idolization here from my vantage; I see control - I see power - the invitation of a temptress ready to share only that which she wishes to share, leaving whichever man falls to her lure - her possession. Still, as mentioned elsewhere - it could really just be about some random celebrity that makes fanbois or fangrrls go oooooh... maybe....

[Angel Bird]

Excellent piece! Every line is filled with enormous potential.

-- the dreamscape I undress within you ... my favorite line

Captivating philosophical work! Kudos!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

On man have you out done yourself with a piece filled with a tidal wave of poetic passion..

you'll want to swim in me
black velvet
silkened sea
a stroke
from my spoken caress

those lines right there are captivating...

AMAZING AMAZING write.

[Sean M. Addams]

very interesting piece love the flow and imagery in this.... nice job.