Completed

summary of the story

   

    Great friends, good grades, and a wonderful family who loves her and never scolded her for playing video games. Who could complain? But something was missing; something was incomplete. Every day felt the same. Eiko went to school, talked with friends, and spent time with family" nothing ever changed. She wasn’t stressed out, wasn’t pressured, but why did she feel like something was missing? Why did her perfect life feel so boring to her? Just what was she lacking?

  One late afternoon, while playing a RPG game, Eiko met a stranger who helped her out when she was in a bit of a pinch. This mysterious person brought color to her dull life. She found him interesting, and they decided to chat. Soon, she began to look forward to their daily chats. Eiko felt comfortable talking with him and shared stories about her personal life. Suddenly, one day, he asked to meet her in person. She became afraid. What would happen if they met? What if he turned out to be someone she actually knew? Her older brother hinted at what she was missing in her life. But what was it? Did it have anything to do with the stranger she met in the game? Find out in the next chapter of “Completed.” (Coming soon! Hopefully.)

 

Author's Note

ignore grammar problems,and give me a review of what do you think of it?,or is it interesting?I give summaries before I write the story.I want readers to read my summary to see if they will enjoy reading the story or if it interest them?sorry if it might not perk your interest much,but I hope some people or even a few people will enjoy this,this is my first time typing a story online,so it might kind of suck,but I will do my best to make it enjoyable!Thank you for wasting your time on this story!I would like to appreciate on some reviews on this story.Thanks again!New edited version.I would like to thank my cousin for helping me editing it.

Reviews

[Lady Tyke]

Sounds like it could have potential. When I started reading I thought of Sword Art Online which is one of my favourite anime's. I love anything to do with gaming so I like the idea of meeting someone who you know through that world.
Definitely interested in reading more.

[Nariko]

aww thank you :) I already posted 2 chapters. Take your time reading them. I am glad that you like the idea!

[Elizabeth C]

Sounds like a very interesting story, kind of reminds me of my life but opposite. I live in a depressing world where others think I don't, and i also play video games and have personal exp with dating online and even meeting an online friend in real life. This story intrigues me and I can't wait to read it!

[Nariko]

haha I can relate. I already posted 2 chapters. Please read those if you want :)

[Elizabeth C]

Ya I saw lol and I will later.

[FedUp]

Based upon this, I would read the next chapter. I want to know what happens next.

[Nariko]

I already posted 2 chapters. haha so go ahead and read it! Thank you!

[❀Subaru_Nyaa!
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I am now looking at the right side of this page and it says 218 views............What's wrong with the people who viewed this work? they didn't even bother to say what they are thinking!? Anyway,this is good,nice cliffhanger by the way but I saw that there another one in your profile,I'll go there right now

[Nariko]

thanks for your review!well,to be honest I thought the same thing as you.I go to writer's café everyday to check how many views I get but the thing I look forward most is reviews.I only got one review for this summary.I wasn't sure if I should type another part 2 for chapter 1.I thought it was fine if I knew people were looking at it but a part of me wanted to wait till I got more reviews.I am glad you enjoyed it.I wished there was a like and dislike button.I appreciate your review a lot.It's been a while since I got an review.Thanks for adding me as a friend.

[Kate]

Shoot this really got me going. You definitely know how to write. In my opinion you have the gift of a great writer. I was grasped all the way through. Only thing I ask is that you don't stop writing because this makes sense

[Nariko]

aww that's thoughtful! I never really had much confidence in myself. I been going on and off in my writing. During the years, I lost some passion. I am trying my best to get back into it.

[Kate]

I think you should definitely keep the work up. Not to be critical but I was surprised by your flair of simplicity and how understandable you expressed your imagination. Very unique :)

[Nariko]

Wow that's a very neat compliment! Thank you!

[Kate]

Absolutely! Cheers :)

[Totoro-Sama]

I would LOVE to read this.
Sign me up as a fan!
I would look forward to all the irony and plot twists!

[Nariko]

sure,just subscribe to me.I will tell you when I finish chapter 1.Your on to something.There is going to be irony and plot twists.How did you know?was I a little too obvious in the summary?

[Nariko]

thanks a lot for giving a review.I appreciate it very much.

[Totoro-Sama]

LOL. I've been reading manga and anime my whole life.
My daily routine involves reading manga similar to this.
I LOVE STORIES LIKE THIS!
Are you trying to relate this to a manga / anime or am I wrong?

[Totoro-Sama]

SUBSCRIBED NAO!

[Totoro-Sama]

No problem!

[Nariko]

well actually I am the same as you.I read manga and watch anime my whole life.So this story is kind of like an anime I imagined in my head in a story form.A story that is like an anime.I am glad your interested in this story.I hope you will enjoy reading the whole story from now on.Thanks for subscribing.I am happy that you read my story.This is my first review on the internet.

[Totoro-Sama]

Lol. Like the other one you reviewed, I am the same. I love writing anime-themed stories! I imagine them in my head, and, hopefully, have the ability to express my image as words! I will be here to read and review and subscribe! Be careful though .. when I review seriously ... I pick on every little detail ... It's no problem! I am glad to be the first!

[Nariko]

It's fine if your nit picky at every detail.I need to someone like that to read my story.I wrote stories before but not online.I used to handwrite a couple of them and have my friends read them buy my friends never gave me serious commentary.They all said "yeah.it's good,or interesting."I had a friend who I was writing buddies with but she barely has time to check my stories.So I decided to do some online.I wanted to improve on my writing and wanted others to review my stories so I know what I need to do to improve.I actually wanted to be a writer when I grow up.I have a tons of writing ideas in my head that I want to write but I don't have that much time on my hands anymore due to school.So,it's fine.I accept negative and positive reviews.

[Totoro-Sama]

Oh. Nit-picky to the MAX! Here is an example of one of my reviews : http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Echo14/1330029/. Scroll down~

I SHALL DO MY BEST! I will try to be blunt, but blunt enough. XD
OMG! I WANT TO BE A WRITER AS WELL!
But I think I'll keep it as a hobby. Parents believe in the medical field.

I understand.
School .. IT'S IN THE WAY! But school helps in improving ability~

[Nariko]

I know school helps improving ability.My parents said I should do whatever I want for my career.They said "there is no point in making a lot of money if you don't enjoy your job,being happy is more important than how much you make."I understand the struggles of being a writer.I know isn't easy and I might fail from time to time but I will fight and do my best to be the top.I understand why some parents want some of their children to be in the medical field because it's more successful in your future but We as children should be able to make our own choices as to what we want to do when we grow up.This is our future not our parents.Our parents' job is to support us in whatever we do and tell us when we do something right or wrong.Sorry got a little too deep in subject.I always do this.oops!sorry it's my own opinion.

[Totoro-Sama]

I understand. I agree with you. But, I guess I'll stick to the medical track and be a part-time writer during my break times. Or something like that. It will take a while. But I will be able to do what I love~ The struggles of being a writer ... everyone has their own opinion and their own way of overcoming it!

[Nariko]

you can be a part-time writer.some famous writer work full-time careers and do writing when they have extra time.I am sure you can find a way to be able to do what you love.I believe in it!

[Totoro-Sama]

And you as well! Know that in whatever you do, you have my support and I shall always be there to read your works! I plan to be in WC for a while~

[Nariko]

thank you very much. >.< :) good luck to you too.I will read yours too.

[Totoro-Sama]

Yay! We are writing buddies now~

[Nariko]

yep.we are writing buddies on the internet!

[Totoro-Sama]

Hooray~!!!! :)