To be honest, even tho you do a good bit of rhyming thru-out, as I was reading this, the rhyming does not feel like the central aspect of your poem. It's enjoyable when I notice it, but it does not drive the reading. Also, I'm not of the opinion that rhyme must be uniform thru-out any poem, so I think you're worrying over nothing in your authors note! *wink! wink!* Now about your overall message . . . you really cover much territory, as far as describing your reasons for writing. I think you probably hit on things that are true for every writer. My favorite part is the start, where you say you never even considered being a poet -- neither did I! It just became a pastime without me even intending it! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Dear Margie, Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I truly appreciate your comments and adv.. read moreDear Margie, Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I truly appreciate your comments and advice on this. Thank you so much! It's been knocking around in my head for ages, but will think it through again. Truly appreciate your views dear friend (((HUGS BACK)))
You do a great job of expressing the passion that drives any poet, any writer, and you've succinctly expressed that drive, that deep-seated need to spar with the need to ever-try to express one's innermost feelings through the valued currency of words.
Nicely done, and all the best,
Lanny
Posted 5 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
Thank you so much Lanny, for your words. I so love my 'words', and am surprised such a love came as.. read moreThank you so much Lanny, for your words. I so love my 'words', and am surprised such a love came as late as it did, but can see myself doing this for the rest of my life, I love writing! Thank you again my friend, for reviewing and your comments. Glad you liked it.
All the best to you also.
Richard
wow wow wow...How and why have your poems passed me? This is so so beautiful, I relate with every stanza, I totally love this and still wondering why it has only 3 reviews.
The flow is fine Richard and rhyme doesn't have to be end rhyme. Internal rhyme works just as well. Once hooked by the writing bug, you are hooked for good. I enjoyed you conveying to the reader your story of how you came to write. Make you always find enjoyment in it.
Thank you so much Chris for reading, 'I Write' and for your comments. So relieved about the rhyming.. read moreThank you so much Chris for reading, 'I Write' and for your comments. So relieved about the rhyming thing. Yes, I am finding immense enjoyment in my writings and have just got some more copies of my first poetry book printed. Immense pleasure absolutely! Take care my friend and thank you :)
6 Years Ago
Well done Richard on your first poetry book. May you always find joy in writing.
I love the flow of this Richard
rhyming doesn't matter to me as a reader or writer. I like flow of a poem and meaning more than strict rhymes, you have cracked the nutshell on this one love it shows your innermost feelings
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Hi Julie Thank you so much for reading and confirming that rhyme isn't everything. I too, love th.. read moreHi Julie Thank you so much for reading and confirming that rhyme isn't everything. I too, love the flow of second stanza and trying to turn it around just didn't work lol. But I'm happy as it is. Thanks again for reading and the re-assurance :)
To be honest, even tho you do a good bit of rhyming thru-out, as I was reading this, the rhyming does not feel like the central aspect of your poem. It's enjoyable when I notice it, but it does not drive the reading. Also, I'm not of the opinion that rhyme must be uniform thru-out any poem, so I think you're worrying over nothing in your authors note! *wink! wink!* Now about your overall message . . . you really cover much territory, as far as describing your reasons for writing. I think you probably hit on things that are true for every writer. My favorite part is the start, where you say you never even considered being a poet -- neither did I! It just became a pastime without me even intending it! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Dear Margie, Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I truly appreciate your comments and adv.. read moreDear Margie, Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I truly appreciate your comments and advice on this. Thank you so much! It's been knocking around in my head for ages, but will think it through again. Truly appreciate your views dear friend (((HUGS BACK)))
Hi, I'm Richard. It says I'm new, but have been here for some time. I live in country NSW, Australia. I was born with a severe handicap, but have always lived in 'mainstream' society; family, scho.. more..