What's In the Cup?

I really don't know what I was trying to do here, I just felt like writing.

Blurred lines between land and skies

She sits with sparkles in her eyes

She wonders when the moon will rise

She waits with something in her cup

Something that will put her worries to ease

It boils her skin and flushes her face

It oh man was it a tease

She sits alone with a blurred vision

Remembering the incision

The cup drops making a pop

Heart racing

Blood evaporating

Skin melting

She falls onto the floor and it feels like ice

Was it always this nice?

Cold to the touch and soothes

Wanting to make a move

She rolls over

Stumbling and bumping

Into the room

She opened the door but yet still wanting more

She then collapses onto the floor

Reviews

[Carly]

Hi, thanks so much for your comments on my post. Much appreciated! This is a great poem, you have some good rhymes in here, it flows really well. Good descriptive words as well, thanks for sharing :)

[Desiree O'Neal]

Thanks for taking the time to comment your kind words on my poem :D

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Well written and my your cup overflow with only goodness and mercy and nothing that hurts or pains or even drains you, you too are special don’t ever forget that🌹

[Desiree O'Neal]

Thank you I appreciate it that you said this to me.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️😀😀🦋🌹

[lessa (kenzie)]

I could see this whole write, and feel it. very well written

[Desiree O'Neal]

Thank you for the review

[lessa (kenzie)]

not a problem

[Anjali]

So beautiful! This write is very good... The rhyming, though! Perfection. I loved it a lot.

[Desiree O'Neal]

:D thanks, I was board and felt like writing so this was the result.

[Anjali]

Oh. Then please get bored more often and create beautiful things. You're welcome.

[Desiree O'Neal]

haha I just might have to.

[Resa]

This poem is sad and eloquently written.
I really like the way you write:)

[Desiree O'Neal]

Thank you ^.^ by the way how's your poem going?

[Resa]

Still working on part 3. I’ve been working a lot lately, it’s been hard to focus:( usually once I get the Chance to sit down with my thoughts and write,I finish it in an hour. ( Not including edit and rewrites) of course

[Desiree O'Neal]

wow thats cool it takes me like a whole week to come up with something and write it, I have a hard time starting something and finishing it so I have at least 18 unfinished writings or poems. I hope to read some of your work soon, really excited.

[Resa]

It takes you longer because you actually know how to write a short story:)
I on the other hand,have to do it in sectional poems. I’m almost finished with part three. I’m starting to feel like the adult version of DR. Suess. LOL. I wish I possessed the talent , to have done this as a short story.

[Desiree O'Neal]

aww your so nice. even if you think you can't write in a short story format your poemes are just as amazing and I love reading them.