In The Morning of Our Lives

This is a poem I wrote for my high school English class. Considering I had to follow certain guidelines it's not exactly how I wanted it, but I figured I'd put it on here to get myself started =]

In the morning of our lives
we can't see far from where we stand.
Our sight is rendered far from perfect
by the dilemmas we have at hand.

But 16 years lived on this earth
is like spending only minutes at the zoo.
Theres so much more to see and find
that the young often leave unchecked.

High school may say you're a reject;
make you question the reason for your birth.
However, these early years do not reflect
the person you will become or your worth.

It wouldn't be right to give up and not strive
to be the very best that you can.
Although problems you face now seem awfully grand,
they will pass as a new day arrives.

But life flies by quickly in front of you
like paper caught in the wind,
so although there is much ahead, make today count too.
Enjoy what you can, and take every opportunity to grin.

Author's Note

I've never been one to write poems often, so I know it probably isn't great, but if you care to give your opinions I'd love to hear them!

Reviews

I think it's great! It's true, this too shall pass. Enjoy the moment, strive for greatness, be who you will be and not who they tell you to be.

[CR8TEME]

Lindsay,

Okay, I agree completely on the topic and the theme- School I mean, it is a zoo. I saw the guys jumping off the lockers and I swear it looked like they were monkeys, I thought I was going to die from the danger. It really is a zoo.

Anyways, I like the way you gave the reader reassurance, and advice, and its true, it wont reflect much on your life. No one will say what were your grades in highschool?

Great work.

[M.D]

I would work on rhymes so flow goes. NIce reflections and observations for 16 year old =)

[Lauren]

I love this one! And I love these lines: "But 16 years lived on this earth / is like spending only minutes at the zoo" and "But life flies by quickly in front of you / like paper caught in the wind." Keep writing and posting! :)